Subject: This was a fun read, but ...
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Posted on: 2015-02-16 14:37:00 UTC

Carry emerged from the bathroom four minutes later, ...
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“You seem to bring a good omen with you, partner. Let me see what we have here.” Carry said as he stepped out of the bathroom.

Still-not-an-agent Hieronymus rubbed his eyes. "Did Carry just step out of the bathroom twice?" he wondered aloud. "Also, I’m used to see a comma with the quotation mark when it’s followed by something like ‘Carry said’,” he continued. "Although I admit that it would look weird with Carry saying two full sentences. Maybe this should be reworded?"
Not-an-agent-yet Androia Avatar hit him over the head. "PPCing the PPC is a bad idea," she scolded. "We should restrict these shenanigans to the badfic games."

Carry opened the portal and stepped through into a classroom that was filled with beige outlines of generic people in a barely described classroom.
Hieronymus silently paged the Redundant Department of Redundancy while Androia looked the other way. Then he stared unblinkingly into the void that was revealed beyond the classroom’s walls when the upper part of said walls became invisible to make them match the height of the waist high shelves without crashing the ceiling on the generic people’s heads.

Gloom looked at him oddly and looked over to the corner, and blinked when she saw portable screen had appeared in the corner.
Androia caught the stray word that had left its intended position between "saw" and "portable" and threw it at Hieronymus to get him out of the stupor.

“Are all flashbacks like this?” Gloom asked, looking around the room, and how she was now a sickly blend of blue and yellow.
"There may be another word for you to catch," grumbled Hieronymus, rubbing his head where the first word had hit him, "but I don’t see where it is."

Time passed. Androia wondered briefly whether Madam Pomphrey might be a Mini from the badfic. Hieronymus frowned when Carry finally looked over and Gloom and gave her a tired smile ("Don’t know what to do with this.") and when Gloom stuttered ordering the canon characters to to go back where you were when Deathly Hallows started. Then he had to page the Repetitive Department of Repetition because Carry handed out wands before fumbling the RA out and opening a portal before shooing the canons through.

Arriving at the Nursery, Androia had to chase another word gone astray from The wall that been behind the portal, but in the end she said, "I am glad that this became so much better after the bad start. Otherwise, our author would still be typing next week. He is so terribly slow."

HG, being terribly sorry for this.

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