Subject: Happy birthday!
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Posted on: 2015-02-15 16:36:00 UTC

-Takes the conga rats from earlier, puts them in a line-
Anyway, I spotted some mechanical errors in the mission:
1) There's HTML markup in the disclaimer.
2) "Beta Credit Goes to roseveare11, " - either you're missing someone, or that should be a full stop.
3) "“Cause it looks like you enjoyed it more then you cleaned yourself~”" - than, not then.
4) "Since this is Harry Potter. I am going to need a Muggle Use Wand" - full stop should be a comma.
5) "“Ah.. yeah, we are.”" - I guess that's supposed to be an ellipsis?
6) "“This fic is making my head ache.There is no way, " - missing space between 'ache.' and 'There'.
7) "“That’s in the canon? Dear Eru”" - missing full stop.
8) "Ever! And Voldemort would never just apparate away for anyone else to get to kill Harry!" - 'Apparate' should be capitalised.
9) "That’s...that is good." - missing space after the ellipsis.
10) "but still...impressive.”" - ditto.
11) "The worlds’ clearing up!" 'world's' not 'worlds''.
12) "What if Yoshi-...." - extra period in the ellipsis.
13) "“Please, forgive me. That is common in your continuum, I take it. " - missing quotation mark.
14) "“Augh ugh. I did not remember my medication”" - missing full stop.
15) "“Oooooo....." - extra periods.
16) "Gloom/doom" - mini-Agent?
17) "He waved the neurolyzer wildly." - what is MiB's mini, anyway
18) "you were killed by voldemort, so…you’re all going" - Capital missing and space missing after the ellipsis.
19) "Little English Harry Potter babies...Arman" - missing space again.

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