Subject: AFAICT, no.
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Posted on: 2015-02-17 12:37:00 UTC
And as far as I know there's only one mission set in the MiB-verse (hS' Empire State of Mind), which has no minis.
Subject: AFAICT, no.
Author:
Posted on: 2015-02-17 12:37:00 UTC
And as far as I know there's only one mission set in the MiB-verse (hS' Empire State of Mind), which has no minis.
In which HQ's not-so aptly named ghost, and a an anachronistic knight from Rohan go to the United States to learn Math from Snape, and stop a romance that never should have been. The moral? Harry+Malfoy+Snape does not add up at all.
It's been quite a while since we have done anything, minus the agents intro. Hopefully everyone enjoys this! Let us know what you think! Posting on Valentine's Day feels appropriate, though my 24th birthday yesterday would also have been. But love conquers age, right?! Haha!
(Because I have someone there!)
"Well, now, Mary, what's this? Is it new friends? It is!" Mary Wentway stared blankly at her mother, her eyes seeming much too big for her face. Elanor chuckled and pushed her hair out of her eyes. "Don't worry, ma chérie, you'll get it eventually. I suppose two weeks is a bit early to expect comprehension."
Since Mary wasn't actively crying (the ceiling had distracted her), Elanor turned her attention to the newcomers. "Arman and Lucy," she murmured, looking down into their side-by-side bassinets. Lucy met her gaze with that same wide-eyed stare that all newborns seem to perfect: not so much disbelief as simple incomprehension of everything in front of her face. Arman, on the other hand, had fallen asleep.
"Well, there have been worse names," Elanor mused, then snorted. "Like the ones your author wanted you to have, for instance. Oh, no, hush now..."
Elanor's snort had broken through Lucy's confusion. The newborn's face seemed to crumple instantly, and she burst out with a high-pitched wailing. Elanor grabbed for her, but it was too late: Mary had taken up the strain, and between them the girls had women Arman as well.
Shaking her head, Elanor put Lucy back in the bassinet - there was no point even trying to rock her quiet, not with the other two pitching their own synchronised fits - and wandered over to the rack of bottles. "Life in the Nursery," she murmured to herself. "Still... at least it's not a badfic."
~
Newborns are a pain in the neck when there's only one of them. I can't imagine what it'd be like to have two or three in the same room.
hS
Carry emerged from the bathroom four minutes later, ...
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“You seem to bring a good omen with you, partner. Let me see what we have here.” Carry said as he stepped out of the bathroom.
Still-not-an-agent Hieronymus rubbed his eyes. "Did Carry just step out of the bathroom twice?" he wondered aloud. "Also, I’m used to see a comma with the quotation mark when it’s followed by something like ‘Carry said’,” he continued. "Although I admit that it would look weird with Carry saying two full sentences. Maybe this should be reworded?"
Not-an-agent-yet Androia Avatar hit him over the head. "PPCing the PPC is a bad idea," she scolded. "We should restrict these shenanigans to the badfic games."
Carry opened the portal and stepped through into a classroom that was filled with beige outlines of generic people in a barely described classroom.
Hieronymus silently paged the Redundant Department of Redundancy while Androia looked the other way. Then he stared unblinkingly into the void that was revealed beyond the classroom’s walls when the upper part of said walls became invisible to make them match the height of the waist high shelves without crashing the ceiling on the generic people’s heads.
Gloom looked at him oddly and looked over to the corner, and blinked when she saw portable screen had appeared in the corner.
Androia caught the stray word that had left its intended position between "saw" and "portable" and threw it at Hieronymus to get him out of the stupor.
“Are all flashbacks like this?” Gloom asked, looking around the room, and how she was now a sickly blend of blue and yellow.
"There may be another word for you to catch," grumbled Hieronymus, rubbing his head where the first word had hit him, "but I don’t see where it is."
Time passed. Androia wondered briefly whether Madam Pomphrey might be a Mini from the badfic. Hieronymus frowned when Carry finally looked over and Gloom and gave her a tired smile ("Don’t know what to do with this.") and when Gloom stuttered ordering the canon characters to to go back where you were when Deathly Hallows started. Then he had to page the Repetitive Department of Repetition because Carry handed out wands before fumbling the RA out and opening a portal before shooing the canons through.
Arriving at the Nursery, Androia had to chase another word gone astray from The wall that been behind the portal, but in the end she said, "I am glad that this became so much better after the bad start. Otherwise, our author would still be typing next week. He is so terribly slow."
HG, being terribly sorry for this.
(Pun retroactively intended.)
... But I have only just figured out where where Doom/Gloom is from and wow that is actually rather obvious in retrospect. She's already shaping up to be one of my more favorite agents. I am fascinated by the concept of friendly ghosts *cough*I blame Casper.*cough* and I am absolutely loving her punny sense of humor (see: title).
I rather enjoyed the mission and very much look forward to seeing more of this pair.
I am glad you like her. I had a bit of trouble over introducing that, since while a lot of agents are up for explaining where they are from, I doubt someone from there would really like to dwell on it. Admittedly, I only added in 'clues' when something really obviously tied to the games happened, as I'd like to think she had some therapy before duty, and could put it out of her mind.
Plus it's there for future conversations. I hope their further missions entertain you as well.
That's a nice mission, but I think you accidentally a few words here:
"The DORKS is our disguise generator, but this mission is one we’re going to have to depend on the Somebody Else’s Problem field in our flashpatches, since it is mostly in their bedroom."
-Takes the conga rats from earlier, puts them in a line-
Anyway, I spotted some mechanical errors in the mission:
1) There's HTML markup in the disclaimer.
2) "Beta Credit Goes to roseveare11, " - either you're missing someone, or that should be a full stop.
3) "“Cause it looks like you enjoyed it more then you cleaned yourself~”" - than, not then.
4) "Since this is Harry Potter. I am going to need a Muggle Use Wand" - full stop should be a comma.
5) "“Ah.. yeah, we are.”" - I guess that's supposed to be an ellipsis?
6) "“This fic is making my head ache.There is no way, " - missing space between 'ache.' and 'There'.
7) "“That’s in the canon? Dear Eru”" - missing full stop.
8) "Ever! And Voldemort would never just apparate away for anyone else to get to kill Harry!" - 'Apparate' should be capitalised.
9) "That’s...that is good." - missing space after the ellipsis.
10) "but still...impressive.”" - ditto.
11) "The worlds’ clearing up!" 'world's' not 'worlds''.
12) "What if Yoshi-...." - extra period in the ellipsis.
13) "“Please, forgive me. That is common in your continuum, I take it. " - missing quotation mark.
14) "“Augh ugh. I did not remember my medication”" - missing full stop.
15) "“Oooooo....." - extra periods.
16) "Gloom/doom" - mini-Agent?
17) "He waved the neurolyzer wildly." - what is MiB's mini, anyway
18) "you were killed by voldemort, so…you’re all going" - Capital missing and space missing after the ellipsis.
19) "Little English Harry Potter babies...Arman" - missing space again.
Why are there so many exclamation points in your post?
Also, the writer of the relevant OFU gets to decide a continuum's mini. Failing that, the person who writes the first mission in the continuum that contains a mini gets to decide.
I forgot to write it. And I have no idea why there are that many exclamation points, probably the key got stuck.
Wait! Is there a MiB OFU?
And as far as I know there's only one mission set in the MiB-verse (hS' Empire State of Mind), which has no minis.
You spelt "neurolyzer" instead of "neuralyzer" at the beginning of the mission.
But aside for that, I found the your mission a very fun read!
Your birthday was yesterday?
*throws cakefetti* Happy Birthday, then! I'll read the mission later; I'm a bit busy at the moment. Looking forward to it!