Subject: This fic...
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Posted on: 2015-02-14 03:56:00 UTC

Wow. Even the excerpts are enough to show how ridiculous this fic was! I honestly had the urge to headwall; the badfic was so stupid.

Good work sporking it.


But there are still errors:

1) The most recent series arcs were actually pretty helpful in terms of character development.

You're missing an apostrophe: The most recent series' arcs...

2)watching the students and Team Rocket apply Potions to the Pokémons’ wounds

"Pokémon" is the same in the singular and the plural. Move the apostrophe: "Pokémon's wounds"

3)Another mini-Missingno, Houen, flew over to join the others, this one looking like a little black ghost.

This one is not as much an error as it is an FYI. "Houen" is the correct transliteration of the Japanese name for the region, even though the English version spells it "Hoenn." But this mission is yours and Iximaz's, so I'll leave it up to you whether you want to keep the Houen-mini or not.

4) I’m not to keen on owning one, anyway.

Missing an O: not too keen

5)and you never found someone trying to steal your horde

Homophone error. The correct word is horde.
You hoard stuff. A big enough horde might be able to take your stuff away by force.

6)“It was nice to see you, too,” the Armored Bird Pokémon replied

Skarmory, you've forgotten your own species name? It's Armor Bird; no -ed.

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