Subject: Welp.
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Posted on: 2016-07-16 00:04:00 UTC
Didn't read this particular thread until after I replied to the OP ^^; Anyway, yeah. I second what the others have said - I've seen some other OCs on the MGE Wiki that are built in the same way as yours, i.e. "a list of powers with a personality tacked on". Character personality has to come first, and it's also important to consider how your OC's abilities, if any, affect their lives and the world around them. It's part of why agents are thoroughly screen-tested by the PGs during the Permission process, the rest of course being how well they're written in general.
And, uh, if you didn't intend to fish for concrit when posting the OP, why post the OP? We look at just about any link to people's characters with a critical eye because we ourselves value well-written OCs. I understand that you're a friend of a friend and I'm as willing to help you out as ever, but I hope you'll forgive me for stating that I don't think you thought this through. Then again I guess we all have those kinds of moments, sooo.
Also, please don't get the idea that we're scheming to tear down your reputation as a person, because believe me, people have actually tried to do that to me in the past and managed a partial success! :C We're always willing to lend a hand to anyone in need, and all you have to do is ask. It's just that your OP really sounded like a "Look at these characters and admire them" sort of deal, which I can say with confidence would not have ended well on any level in most other corners of the Internet. Malice isn't on our agenda - we're trying to help you as a writer and as a person - but I still feel like talking to me or Voyd in private before posting publicly would have been safer in hindsight. ..
And lastly, well... here's a virtual hug from me, in the hopes of comforting you in the aftermath of all this. (/^^)/