First off, I don't know either canon. I heard about both, and I get the gist of BTVS, but know jack about Exalted.

In the prologue, we see both Buffy's, as well as some serial killer guy from the last century's exaltation (word?). That's good, as it establishes the connection between Buffy and Exalted.
We also see the club of ominous people talking about ominous fate things. This would be the point where you could establish further how the mechanics of the 'verses work in each others context, but the only thing we find out is that Buffy is a Solar Exalt(ed), which means that she could turn evil.
You say that you will explain things later on, but there's a difference between keeping things interesting and confusing everyone.

In the first real chapter, the first thing you do is to deny the existence of a character for... reasons. I think.
This chapter also seems more Buffy-centric, which sets the focus for the story. Thing is, if it's really Buffy with Exalted elements, then I'd go and give some more exposition about how the latter works.
Also, you kind of run rampant with the POV switches. The Xander paragraph could have been cut (especially since it wasn't even truly his POV, or does he know Buffy's name by then?) and there's two Buffy parts right after each other.
In general, this is a chapter for Buffy fans to judge in terms of character interactions. Also, no matter what a few of your reviewers say, causing confusion in the reader is a bad thing.

From then on, things get too specific to say anything.


And by the way, on the topic of confusion: Do you want us to give you concrit, or do you want us to do a mission on this?

Wasn't this on Spacebattles? I thought I saw it there once.

Also, I would be interested in the group mission, once I finish my agents.

And it appears this story goes beyond my knowledge, since the last chapter appears to have Spike acting as a good guy. I also don't know Exalted. Perhaps a group mission could be in order? Anyone?

... while I have a working knowledge of Buffy, I don't even know what Exalted is. So I'm no help, I'm afraid.

But: hey, well done for doing this! As any writer knows[citation needed], criticism is key to improvement. Otherwise, you just dig further and further into whatever mistakes you start out with. So I hope you find someone (or ones) to help you out!

hS