Subject: TodayÂ’s my nitpicking day
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Posted on: 2016-06-01 22:00:00 UTC

Thank You and Goodnight

Unfortunately for them, aside from a desk and a chair, there wasn’t much in the way the way of concealment.
Repetition.

Once the Time Lord was flat against the the wall behind Itami, the cyborg tapped his eyeglasses, then glanced above their rim.
Repetition.

“Aha!” he after a moment.
Missing word?

The way it ended, with him sitting on her belly and holding her hands down, made him him blush and look at anything but her.
Repetition.

TYH: Youthful Indiscretion

... when the effect Fate’s gaze became ...
I’m not sure whether a word may be missing there.

I used to glance over the the edge of my eyeglasses
Repetition.

I remember an Azerothian troll hitting his head do that.
Missing word "to"?

trying to look unassuming as possible
Missing word: another "as"?

as she kneeled to look the creature more closely
Missing word "at"?

Which, by Fate’s own admission, shouldn’t have been able to.
Missing word "she"?

He took a sooty-looking CAD out of another pocket and put on the table near the H-CAD
Missing word "it"?

I Thought He Was With You

The Librarian just made a ambivalent sound and leaned back.
"a" should be "an".

HG

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