Hoom, hoom.

Fic to spork: I have no idea what SeaQuest is and none of the people I asked knew it, so I can't really say whether the fic breaks canon, but it definitely has Sue warning signs. The SPaG isn't fantastic, either.

Writing ability (technical): Definitely better. However, your SPaG still has some pretty glaring errors (like comma/full stop substitutions and missing quotation marks). I think you could really use more betas. My own rule of thumb — y'know, for stuff I publish — is never less than two betas, three if I'm not certain and more if I'm doing something big or drastic. Further, leaving stuff like "RC {number}" in when you can just say "the RC" makes your piece looks unfinished.

As a note, the present tense on the Injerd prompt is annoying and not done often, but not too bad an attribute.

PPC knowledge: Mostly solid, except for the recruiter at the job fair (I don't think the PPC does that?) and the implied eating of Pokémon in the Cafeteria (ew, no). Also, Medical (the department) is capitalised.

Activity: So far, the most I've seen out of you is a) activity related to your Permission and b) one-liners appended to stuff other people say. I feel that you're not really involved with the community right now. Not posting a lot is completely fine — RL eats your time, you're away from Internet, whatever — but right now the little you post has no interaction in it, which is pretty bad.

Writing ability (creative):
-The Kelly and Injerd prompt is pretty good, as Key noted. One thing that is really problematic, though, is that it's basically cut off; the ending is way too abrupt and not a natural "ending point" (like, say, leaving for the mission).
-The Kelly and September prompt, well. It feels kinda robotic, there — not too much feeling. Further, September's problem is really confusing — did she eat something bad or is she having her period? Further, the thing about fandoms — I had to google "Topher Brink" to figure the mission is Dollhouse; you should really try to make your writing accessible to people unfamiliar with the fandom concerned (it is my humble opinion that doing so is one of the signs of a truly good PPC writer).
-The food fight prompt has two problems: the cook's mood swing, which is pretty jarring, and the lack of any food fight in a prompt about a food fight. It also looks cut-off.
-The last prompt has one really big problem: it's a prompt about DAC despite it being supposed to be about a robot wearing a paper mask. September and Kelly's interactions are OK, though.
-The "personality" section in Kelly's profile doesn't fit what we actually see of her. September and Injerd's are much better.

Conclusion: almost and with marked improvement, but not quite yet. The clincher of my decision is the activity bit; the PPC is a community first and a shared universe second. Unless another PG objects, Permission denied.
(Don't give up. You're nearly there.)

I don't think we've ever had two Agents with the same name in the PPC before (I've also got an Agent Kelly, although no work with her yet).

More like five cents. This got long.

Agents receive a mission:
-You have a typo on page one: Kelly didn't know what capybara was, but she was glad that she had chosen the salad Nonetheless. "Nonetheless"shouldn't be capitalized if it's part of the previous sentence.
-“We got another 'Topher survives' mission and it looks like I could just about solo it except for the EMP. Can you back me up, or do I need to call someone?” What's EMP? I'll guess an electromagnetic pulse
-No disguise?
-What fandom is this mission for, anyway?
-Do either of the agents have any feelings about this fandom? What does Kelly think when she reads the mission summary? There is a noticeable lack of emotion on the part of both agents which makes the whole story feel slightly off. Kelly doesn't even seem particularly irritated by the mission. It feels routine. Another day at the office. Pretty depressing, actually. Is this the feel you want for them? I think it could work.

Agents receive a mission with Injerd:
-Yesterday's mission was somewhat special, as in it had induced headaches, nausea, and the desire to forget it. That's special?
-She stops as she notices Ingeborg lying on the floor in the main room of the RC. The Narnian bear is asleep, her paws curled around an empty jug of Blackberry Bleepwine. Ohhh. That was kind of beautiful to read.
-Grammar. "Conscientious"is an adjective. I don't think you can be "conscientious to" someone else.
-Another few minutes pass as she dresses and tends to her hair. Makes me wonder what she wears and how she does her hair.
-She freezes before opening her bedroom door, not yet knowing if her partner is a grumpy riser. Great way to establish their relationship.
- Her eyes fall on the acknowledge button, which is now wedged underneath the panel. What happened to it? What's her reaction to seeing this? I feel like you cut this off a bit too soon. Like, a paragraph too soon or something.
-All in all, this was fun to read. Enough of each agent is shown to make me wat to read more about them.

Random Prompt:
-Um. I can't quite see the link between Comed-Tea and the IO.
-I thought Kelly said she wasn't hungry any more?
-Pokemon pot pie is NOT OKAY. Eek. That's a bad line, all right.
-"Princess" to "boney harpy"in a matter of seconds? Eek again. That's pretty jarring.
-Wait, that's where part 2 ends? That doesn't feel like the end of their conversation, or even a logical stopping point. And I thought it said that Kelly was going to start a food fight. And that the second part would explain how the cafeteria got to be such a mess.
-In general, your sentences are good, but the structure and consistency leave a lot to be desired.

Agent Profiles:
-She has an almost cultish obsession with the Ironic Overpower She doesn't show this in the stories. I'd expect her to at least bring it up while discussing the console and missions in the random prompt, but she didn't even mention it.
-What continuum is September from? The only thing I can tell is that it isn't World One, since real Manic Pixie Dream Girls only exist in fictional continua.
-I love the idea of the PPC setting up a booth at a job fair. It makes no sense, since that would reveal the existence of the PPC to any inhabitant of the continuum who happened along and would probably constitute an interference with canon, but I love it anyway.
-If you're still thinking of Injerd as a bit character she might not be ready to appear in published stories.
-Janitor? What janitor?

General comments:
-Who is Kelly currently partnered with, and what RC number are they in? It isn't clear.
-Generally, your spinoff seems good, but not fully developed. It could probably be developed just by writing more, though. Whether or not you get Permission, I'd advise you to write lots of stories about these characters, both stories you deem canon and non-canon stories as exercises.
--In about a week I will be free of responsibilities and will be able to spend time beta reading and discussing characters if you want to. Email is clickable.

--Key