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The closest conversation I could find on separating the Suvians was this:
“* Why not just drop the Sue into the Hotland lava? Problem solved!”
“* Not!Sans will kill us. We have to take both of them out at once or I doubt we’ll survive.”

Both of them at once? Why not focus on finding an opportunity to get Not!Sans far away from the Sue (like getting them in different locations), charging and killing Not!Sans, then killing the Sue after? In the chapter in which the agents decided to kill her, the Suvians later meet at Grillby's and decided they needed some space from each other, so Not!Sans went home while the Sue went to Alphys' house. You should explain why they couldn't wait for them to do that.

You should also explain what's so dangerous about killing the Sue later, because the thing about having to "take both of them out at once" implies that somehow the Sue will successfully kill them by herself. As far as I read in the badfic, she "was in cheerleading for a year". Can a human with a year of cheerleading compare to a monster who can manipulate gravity and summon bones and laser-firing skulls? Or was it something else?

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Terri gets very het up about the Flowey thing, but I actually don't think it's all that bad. I think your author's note is wrong in saying that Flowey should know about the PPC, but what's in the mission is that he knows about them because, well, he was there when they arrived, and he noticed they're not normally there, and he's probably been following them. Then he blindsided them and vanished before they could do anything. Agents do muck up on their missions sometimes, and I'm happy for Terri to be sent in to try and neuralyse him afterwards. (Whether she succeeds or not is up to the next person to write the continuum).

Where I think she massively understated things is the fight. Skarmory: Undertale is an entire game built around giving you the option to not fight people. Would it not have been far more interesting - and fun! - to showcase that mechanic and find a clever solution, rather than just going 'and then Backslash hit him some more'?

I'm going to sum up my philosophy on this, just so you know where I'm coming from:

If a PPC agent gets into a stand-up fight while on a mission, they are doing their job wrong.

Some (lots of?) people disagree with me on that. That is their right. But I still think they're wrong.

hS

I avoided the game for a bit, because everybody on the internet was going crazy about it.
The kind of crazy where they make awful fangames and put them on Gamejolt, every single half-rate LPer goes full throttle with a million episodes, and all the fan-artists have to buy new tablets because the sheer, constant force of their pens on the screens actually cracks them.

That was a bad idea.
I don't want to drown you in calls about how perfect it is, and how it'll cure you of cancer and give you super-strength, or any of that bollocks.

UnderTale is a work of art and you should play it.