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SkarmorySilver
on 2016-02-25 01:30:00 UTC
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I've re-written the ending to this mission - the agents now kill the Suvians separately, and I've also revised the execution of Not!Sans so that it's less of a direct fight and more of a diversion + sneak attack, which hopefully works much better. I've also gotten rid of any mention of Flowey aside from his one appearance in the original fic, because as fun as it is to imagine Terri having to nerualyze him, his appearance in the original ending pretty much hinged on helping the agents out of a tight spot. The Suvians being killed the way they are in the new ending pretty much eliminates any excuse for him to show up.
So... yeah. Sorry that I accidentally caused you to have a bad time, Terri! ^^;
Okay, so I read this. by
Huinesoron
on 2016-02-24 12:18:00 UTC
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And then I let Terri Ryan review it.
She, uh. Got rather heated, I'm afraid.
Terri Reviews: Dundertale
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So... by
Ozzielot
on 2016-02-24 07:39:00 UTC
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1. I get that it would be difficult to find a good opportunity to try and kill the Sue and Not!Sans, but I'm finding it odd that the agents didn't at least talk about a way to split them up, charge and kill Not!Sans without giving him the chance to fight back. I might have missed the conversation but I didn't find any conversation like that.
2. Flowey's status as a deity-like being in this mission is my main issue.
To address a point:
"However, Flowey knows about how to SAVE and RESET and, for the longest time, he’s used everyone else as playthings until he got bored of doing so. I’m guessing he’s probably one of the closest things that Undertale has to an actual deity, and at the very least his meta skills have rendered him practically omniscient."
Why would that justify Flowey knowing about the PPC? So he knows how to SAVE and RESET like in a videogame. Is that supposed to mean he can't be dealt with by way of neuralyzation? Would his SAVE and RESET abilities or any of his meta skills erase any neuralyzation done to him?
On practical omniscience, I'll quote Huinesoron here: "Practical omniscience =/= true omniscience. Any method of omniscience that isn't simply They Just Know By Magic is spoofable by the PPC." Unless you consider Flowey's meta skills Knowing By Magic.
3. A nitpicky one: Not!Sans' dialogue format resembling more like Canon!Sans than the badfic's Sans.
Not!Sans was not Sans, so why go through the trouble of changing the font for an impostor?
It should be noted... by
domirossi
on 2016-02-22 23:11:00 UTC
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... That this is the first time I actually listened to the linked music while reading a mission.
Anyway, I'm seconding that warning: If you haven't played Undertale yet and you plan to, do NOT read this mission. Undertale is truly an awesome experience, and while spoilers don't ruin it, it can get pretty close sometimes.
(Also, the sporked fic is even worse than the mission makes it look like, IMO. It's just that it's so beige it gets boring after a while.)