Subject: Yay!
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Posted on: 2015-12-03 22:25:00 UTC
Zeb gets some new weapons, there's one less Sue to worry about, and that was one fantastic execution method! Also, nice to see that you pointed out the Said-Ism problem, which is something I myself used to be guilty of. I didn't realize that was charge-worthy even when writing some of my earlier missions, so I'll be sure to remember that next time.
Zeb opened a portal to the next chapter, skipping over a rather pointless pranking scene “It goes under Azula’s bed, so we’ll have to crawl,” he whispered.
Missing period.
“How much do you want to bet this is never mentioned again?” the Aviator asked in an overly-bright voice.
Are you sure there should be a hyphen there? I usually see it as "overly bright".