Subject: Congratulations!
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Posted on: 2015-12-03 21:45:00 UTC
Nice to see you tackling fairly normal badfic again. I feel like I missed something, though; why doesn't the Aviator have her TARDIS? What did she do wrong?
By the way, ten points to Slytherin for getting Fire Lord Azulon (Ozai?) to take her out. >:)
In which the Aviator and Zeb head into Avatar: The Last Airbender and the Sue gets on the Fire Lord's bad side.
Also, mission number 45, guys! 
Well done. Even though I know very very little about that continuum, I enjoyed it nevertheless.
Zeb gets some new weapons, there's one less Sue to worry about, and that was one fantastic execution method! Also, nice to see that you pointed out the Said-Ism problem, which is something I myself used to be guilty of. I didn't realize that was charge-worthy even when writing some of my earlier missions, so I'll be sure to remember that next time.
Zeb opened a portal to the next chapter, skipping over a rather pointless pranking scene “It goes under Azula’s bed, so we’ll have to crawl,” he whispered.
Missing period.
“How much do you want to bet this is never mentioned again?” the Aviator asked in an overly-bright voice.
Are you sure there should be a hyphen there? I usually see it as "overly bright".
Fixed the first. The second I'm pretty sure is right... Anyone?
Said Bookism is fine on occasion; like, if the agents are speaking and it's not immediately clear from the dialogue how they're saying it or you want to emphasize how they're saying it is when they're okay (my opinion only, mind!), but when you've got these massively long chapters and are averaging 'said' as a dialogue tag three times per chapter, it's massively distracting. Especially with gems like this one!
"But where are we going to go? We are enemies of the Earth Kingdom and fugitives from the Fire Nation" Iroh gushed.
*cackles*
Nice to see you tackling fairly normal badfic again. I feel like I missed something, though; why doesn't the Aviator have her TARDIS? What did she do wrong?
By the way, ten points to Slytherin for getting Fire Lord Azulon (Ozai?) to take her out. >:)
But, um, yeah... what Voyd said. She's had it confiscated since September.
And I'm pretty sure it was Ozai. Lemme check.
As she was approaching Azula's room she was stopped by some Fire Nation guards and soon Fire Lord Ozai appeared.
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As the agents dragged her back to Fire Lord Ozai, they exchanged glances and nodded.
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Ozai stood, fury filling his entire being.
Yup, pretty sure it was him.
You do recall that Ave stole that TARDIS, and abandoned the Duty, yes?
... that DoSAT are so fed up with looking after hundreds of mothballed time capsules that they would've given Rina the TARDIS and thrown in a 'two for the price of one' just to get rid of it. ;)
hS
TARDIS steal their Time Lord, not the other way around. She would have given her back sooner without this time loop little problem.
A TARDIS is first and foremost a mere vehicle. Yes, it is sentient, but it serves a definite purpose. Don't start thinking that they're as capable as actual people though-- when we did start making them like that, things got weird. Very weird. Maybe too weird.
Like the Type-103s for example. I never could get used to how freaky they were.
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I couldn't resist. The Guardsman always will try to get a word in sideways about these things.
-ST
That's not Idris; that's 100% the TARDIS speaking.
I'll thank you to not speak about TARDISes like they're nothing more than vehicles. Yes, that is their primary function, but they're people, too. Thank you very much, Mister 'I-Graduated-The-Academy-With-A-Degree-In-TARDIS-Engineering'. *eyeroll*
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This is what happens when you reply in-character on the Board, before you know it agents are crawling out of the walls to argue.
Look, we had to make them hyper-intelligent in order for them to crunch the numbers involved in space-time travel. Giving them personalities was an unexpected side effect.
Sometimes I think that some people like to romanticize the role of the TARDIS and exaggerate their importance. Like pilots, for example.
Ahem.
-E
...that you can't properly fly a TARDIS unless you're working together? It's called a symbiotic bond for a reason, Emiran.
And if you get to talk smack about pilots, I get to talk smack about engineers. So nyah.
Face it-- it's like driving a very intelligent car. Sure, you need the sym-nucleus to interface with the TARDIS systems but it's more of a key to get inside than... well, I'm repeating myself. You get what I mean, yeah?
And I'll talk as much smack about the hotshots who drive around the things I helped to design, thank you very much. I didn't spend five centuries at the Academy and a ten-year apprenticeship to have someone lecture me on how it feels to operate a time machine.
-E
P.S: Did you see my smiley face keychain anywhere? I think I might've left it at your place last time I dropped by-- check the repair manuals I just gave you. Might be wedged inside as a bookmark.
Though considering I could fly circles around you any day, I think—just think, mind you—that I might be onto something here. :P
And yes, actually, it looks like it somehow fell under the coffee table. I'll bring it by later.
However, I think anyone here knows about this one Type-40, who did stole that one madman, right?;)
And I'm not even talking about that moment when she get fleshy for a moment.
...one person--wait, two and even then it was more of a kidnapping-- on billions is not statistically significant.
-E
I mean, the show isn't exactly showing other TARDIS very often, so statistically, the only TARDIS I regulary saw proves me right, and I think that if a Type-40 can do this, other TARDIS can.
Last points. I never heard about cars, no matter how intelligent, driving you where you were needed, neither about cars wanting to suicide after their pilotes died, but that could just be me.
Pretty good mission. It's so good seeing glitterbags getting the Darwin Awards they deserve, it makes for a funny, although scary, kill. Now, I guess that Ave will crush this coffee table someday because she just had to pilot Baby to the RC, right? Christmas time get really early this year.
Sue trees, uh? Now I've got this picture in my head where the Once-Ler is slaughtering this suvian forest, and the Lorax watching him, approving for once.
Don't have school at the moment thanks to a forced withdrawl, but on the bright (?) side, it means I have a lot of time to write. *sigh*
I still can't believe the Sue thought it was okay to punch Ozai in the fraking face; come on, he scarred his own son for life and banished him on a wild turtle duck chase because he spoke out of turn; what's he going to do to someone of no blood relation who physically assaults him?!
BEHOLD THE SUE TREE!
I hope it's nothing too serious and you'll get better soon enough.
This level of dumb is pretty impressive, I'd class it with the D.A. granted to the guy who tried to rob an armory where cops were shopping. Glitterbags are clearly evolution's worst blunder for pulling such stunts.
Okay, now I've got my aviators and I can see this thing without my eyes bleeding, I'm sure that the Lorax would be asking to people to cut down this thing.
I can walk again, so that's something, ne? Of course as soon as one thing clears up the doctors notice something else, which is just fantastic... meh.inb4 the Lorax asks Ozai to burn down the Sue Tree
Really, REALLY hope you'll get better.
Even Ozai would agree to do that. (By the way, how did you do this crossing thing with the last sentence? Also, is there a list somewhere about this sort of modifications on the text?)
I'm too young for this. :P
And I got the strikethrough by typing [s]words you want struck out[/s], only use in place of [ and ].
I hope you get better soon Iximaz. Anyway, on to the computer mumbo-jumbo:
HTML has three (and in some cases five) characters that have a special meaning to the browser when they appear in text. They are <, >, & and sometimes ' and ". In general, if you want to use any of the first three, you need to escape them. To do this, you do as follows:
| To show | Type |
|---|---|
| < | < |
| > | > |
| < | > |
Was meant to show that, for an "&", you type "&"
I'm too young for this. :P
And I got the strikethrough by typing [s]words you want struck out[/s], only use < and > in place of [ and ].
I imagined the Lorax as Emperor Palpatine, looking at anyone approaching the Sue Tree with an axe, and saying, "Do it."
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Jar Jar Bane.
"Oh, yousa thinkin darkness is yousa al."