Re: Yay!

Subject: Re: Yay!
Author: Iximaz
Posted on: 2015-12-03 22:31:00 UTC

Fixed the first. The second I'm pretty sure is right... Anyone?

Said Bookism is fine on occasion; like, if the agents are speaking and it's not immediately clear from the dialogue how they're saying it or you want to emphasize how they're saying it is when they're okay (my opinion only, mind!), but when you've got these massively long chapters and are averaging 'said' as a dialogue tag three times per chapter, it's massively distracting. Especially with gems like this one!

"But where are we going to go? We are enemies of the Earth Kingdom and fugitives from the Fire Nation" Iroh gushed.

*cackles*

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New mission! by Iximaz on 2015-12-03 20:39:00 UTC Reply

In which the Aviator and Zeb head into Avatar: The Last Airbender and the Sue gets on the Fire Lord's bad side.

Also, mission number 45, guys!

I liked it! And bow ties ARE COOOOL! by Silenthunder on 2015-12-03 22:54:00 UTC Reply

Well done. Even though I know very very little about that continuum, I enjoyed it nevertheless.
Yay! by SkarmorySilver on 2015-12-03 22:25:00 UTC Reply

Zeb gets some new weapons, there's one less Sue to worry about, and that was one fantastic execution method! Also, nice to see that you pointed out the Said-Ism problem, which is something I myself used to be guilty of. I didn't realize that was charge-worthy even when writing some of my earlier missions, so I'll be sure to remember that next time.

Zeb opened a portal to the next chapter, skipping over a rather pointless pranking scene “It goes under Azula’s bed, so we’ll have to crawl,” he whispered.

Missing period.

“How much do you want to bet this is never mentioned again?” the Aviator asked in an overly-bright voice.

Are you sure there should be a hyphen there? I usually see it as "overly bright".

Re: Yay! by Iximaz on 2015-12-03 22:31:00 UTC Reply

Fixed the first. The second I'm pretty sure is right... Anyone?

Said Bookism is fine on occasion; like, if the agents are speaking and it's not immediately clear from the dialogue how they're saying it or you want to emphasize how they're saying it is when they're okay (my opinion only, mind!), but when you've got these massively long chapters and are averaging 'said' as a dialogue tag three times per chapter, it's massively distracting. Especially with gems like this one!

"But where are we going to go? We are enemies of the Earth Kingdom and fugitives from the Fire Nation" Iroh gushed.

*cackles*

Congratulations! by eatpraylove on 2015-12-03 21:45:00 UTC Reply

Nice to see you tackling fairly normal badfic again. I feel like I missed something, though; why doesn't the Aviator have her TARDIS? What did she do wrong?

By the way, ten points to Slytherin for getting Fire Lord Azulon (Ozai?) to take her out. >:)

This was a fun one. by Iximaz on 2015-12-03 22:17:00 UTC Reply

But, um, yeah... what Voyd said. She's had it confiscated since September.

And I'm pretty sure it was Ozai. Lemme check.

As she was approaching Azula's room she was stopped by some Fire Nation guards and soon Fire Lord Ozai appeared.

...

As the agents dragged her back to Fire Lord Ozai, they exchanged glances and nodded.

...

Ozai stood, fury filling his entire being.

Yup, pretty sure it was him.
You, uh... by Voyd on 2015-12-03 21:49:00 UTC Reply

You do recall that Ave stole that TARDIS, and abandoned the Duty, yes?

I've been out of the loop. I know that now. (nm) by eatpraylove on 2015-12-04 16:15:00 UTC Reply
I maintain... by Huinesoron on 2015-12-04 14:59:00 UTC Reply

... that DoSAT are so fed up with looking after hundreds of mothballed time capsules that they would've given Rina the TARDIS and thrown in a 'two for the price of one' just to get rid of it. ;)

hS
Nonsense. ;) by Hardric on 2015-12-03 22:20:00 UTC Reply

TARDIS steal their Time Lord, not the other way around. She would have given her back sooner without this time loop little problem.

That's an overly romantic view of it. by Emiranlanoamar on 2015-12-03 23:16:00 UTC Reply

A TARDIS is first and foremost a mere vehicle. Yes, it is sentient, but it serves a definite purpose. Don't start thinking that they're as capable as actual people though-- when we did start making them like that, things got weird. Very weird. Maybe too weird.

Like the Type-103s for example. I never could get used to how freaky they were.

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I couldn't resist. The Guardsman always will try to get a word in sideways about these things.

-ST

Canon would like to disagree with you. by The Aviator on 2015-12-03 23:29:00 UTC Reply

That's not Idris; that's 100% the TARDIS speaking.

I'll thank you to not speak about TARDISes like they're nothing more than vehicles. Yes, that is their primary function, but they're people, too. Thank you very much, Mister 'I-Graduated-The-Academy-With-A-Degree-In-TARDIS-Engineering'. *eyeroll*

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This is what happens when you reply in-character on the Board, before you know it agents are crawling out of the walls to argue.

I don't appreciate you talking smack about my degree. by Emiranlanoamar on 2015-12-04 00:11:00 UTC Reply

Look, we had to make them hyper-intelligent in order for them to crunch the numbers involved in space-time travel. Giving them personalities was an unexpected side effect.

Sometimes I think that some people like to romanticize the role of the TARDIS and exaggerate their importance. Like pilots, for example.

Ahem.

-E

And who was it who told me... by The Aviator on 2015-12-04 00:19:00 UTC Reply

...that you can't properly fly a TARDIS unless you're working together? It's called a symbiotic bond for a reason, Emiran.

And if you get to talk smack about pilots, I get to talk smack about engineers. So nyah.

Well, it's still taking orders from you, isn't it? by Emiranlanoamar on 2015-12-04 00:39:00 UTC Reply

Face it-- it's like driving a very intelligent car. Sure, you need the sym-nucleus to interface with the TARDIS systems but it's more of a key to get inside than... well, I'm repeating myself. You get what I mean, yeah?

And I'll talk as much smack about the hotshots who drive around the things I helped to design, thank you very much. I didn't spend five centuries at the Academy and a ten-year apprenticeship to have someone lecture me on how it feels to operate a time machine.

-E

P.S: Did you see my smiley face keychain anywhere? I think I might've left it at your place last time I dropped by-- check the repair manuals I just gave you. Might be wedged inside as a bookmark.

Whatever you say, pops. by The Aviator on 2015-12-04 00:57:00 UTC Reply

Though considering I could fly circles around you any day, I think—just think, mind you—that I might be onto something here. :P

And yes, actually, it looks like it somehow fell under the coffee table. I'll bring it by later.

"This is some sort of elaborate mating ritual, isn't it..." (nm) by Spinel Promotor Notary of the ConCounOfGaInEx on 2015-12-04 21:03:00 UTC Reply

Pretty creepy sure, sir. by Hardric on 2015-12-03 23:26:00 UTC Reply

However, I think anyone here knows about this one Type-40, who did stole that one madman, right?;)

And I'm not even talking about that moment when she get fleshy for a moment.

I don't know about you, but... by Emiranlanoamar on 2015-12-04 00:14:00 UTC Reply

...one person--wait, two and even then it was more of a kidnapping-- on billions is not statistically significant.

-E

That's more a matter of screen-time than anything else. by Hardric on 2015-12-04 06:24:00 UTC Reply

I mean, the show isn't exactly showing other TARDIS very often, so statistically, the only TARDIS I regulary saw proves me right, and I think that if a Type-40 can do this, other TARDIS can.

Last points. I never heard about cars, no matter how intelligent, driving you where you were needed, neither about cars wanting to suicide after their pilotes died, but that could just be me.

Wow, you write really fast. by Hardric on 2015-12-03 21:08:00 UTC Reply

Pretty good mission. It's so good seeing glitterbags getting the Darwin Awards they deserve, it makes for a funny, although scary, kill. Now, I guess that Ave will crush this coffee table someday because she just had to pilot Baby to the RC, right? Christmas time get really early this year.

Sue trees, uh? Now I've got this picture in my head where the Once-Ler is slaughtering this suvian forest, and the Lorax watching him, approving for once.

Yeah, the blessings of medical problems. by Iximaz on 2015-12-03 21:13:00 UTC Reply

Don't have school at the moment thanks to a forced withdrawl, but on the bright (?) side, it means I have a lot of time to write. *sigh*

I still can't believe the Sue thought it was okay to punch Ozai in the fraking face; come on, he scarred his own son for life and banished him on a wild turtle duck chase because he spoke out of turn; what's he going to do to someone of no blood relation who physically assaults him?!

BEHOLD THE SUE TREE!

Aw, though luck. by Hardric on 2015-12-03 21:24:00 UTC Reply

I hope it's nothing too serious and you'll get better soon enough.

This level of dumb is pretty impressive, I'd class it with the D.A. granted to the guy who tried to rob an armory where cops were shopping. Glitterbags are clearly evolution's worst blunder for pulling such stunts.

Okay, now I've got my aviators and I can see this thing without my eyes bleeding, I'm sure that the Lorax would be asking to people to cut down this thing.

It's mostly better now. by Iximaz on 2015-12-03 22:14:00 UTC Reply

I can walk again, so that's something, ne? Of course as soon as one thing clears up the doctors notice something else, which is just fantastic... meh.

~~inb4 the Lorax asks Ozai to burn down the Sue Tree~~

Okay, you're getting me scared now. by Hardric on 2015-12-03 22:23:00 UTC Reply

Really, REALLY hope you'll get better.

Even Ozai would agree to do that. (By the way, how did you do this crossing thing with the last sentence? Also, is there a list somewhere about this sort of modifications on the text?)

Meh, it's probably nothing. by Iximaz on 2015-12-04 01:07:00 UTC Reply

I'm too young for this. :P

And I got the ~~strikethrough~~ by typing [s]words you want struck out[/s], only use in place of [ and ].

Thanks for the anwer. (nm) by Hardric on 2015-12-04 07:51:00 UTC Reply
HTML escaping (thread = jacked) by Tomash on 2015-12-04 05:53:00 UTC Reply

I hope you get better soon Iximaz. Anyway, on to the computer mumbo-jumbo:

HTML has three (and in some cases five) characters that have a special meaning to the browser when they appear in text. They are <, >, & and sometimes ' and ". In general, if you want to use any of the first three, you need to escape them. To do this, you do as follows:

To show Type

< <

> >

< >

Now, you can sometimes get away without doing this because browsers try really hard to deal with people who don't know how to write HTML. (This is why the whole "weird color names" thing works as well). However, you need to use escaping when you write things that might look like tags, such as anything an Andalite might say.

(For bonus recursion fun, "View Source" on this post)

To show	Type
<	<
>	>
<	>

Correction on last row of table by Tomash on 2015-12-04 05:54:00 UTC Reply

Was meant to show that, for an "&", you type "&"

Meh, it's probably nothing. by Iximaz on 2015-12-04 01:07:00 UTC Reply

I'm too young for this. :P

And I got the ~~strikethrough~~ by typing [s]words you want struck out[/s], only use < and > in place of [ and ].

For some reason by Matt Cipher on 2015-12-03 21:26:00 UTC Reply

I imagined the Lorax as Emperor Palpatine, looking at anyone approaching the Sue Tree with an axe, and saying, "Do it."

And now I remember Darth Jar Jar. (nm) by Hardric on 2015-12-03 21:32:00 UTC Reply

You know what's worse? by Matt Cipher on 2015-12-03 21:37:00 UTC Reply

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Jar Jar Bane.

"Oh, yousa thinkin darkness is yousa al."