Subject: Exactly!
Author:
Posted on: 2015-11-13 13:45:00 UTC

But perhaps the worst part of this whole mess is that Hermione's (really OOC) parents outright reject her because they " don't want to be reminded every day that Hermione is dead. " Look, I unfortunately know from personal expirience what's like to someone in your family suffering from severe memory loss and it's definitely not pretty and it can very unsettling, but you can't just abandon your own child like that. I mean, if you were to substitute the potion for a stroke or trauma-induced amnesia, would they still react like that?

Oh, then there is this lovely bit of really poorly executed fourth-wall breaking:" Up to now, this narrative has dwealt on Hermione's plight. The effects of the potion on her. Now, let's switch to Ron's. You may remember, and hopefully you do, or you've got short term memory loss issues, that the potion was meant to give Ron all the intelligence that Hermione lost. You might have assumed, since Ron's name was mentioned, literally, only ten times in the last chapter, compared to Hermione's twenty-four, that maybe since the potion was made so badly, Ron had escaped all its effects. "

Also, the author somehow managed to misspell Weasley as Weasly a grand total of ... 16 Glaurunging times!

Reply Return to messages