Subject: Congratulations – and what I always do.
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Posted on: 2017-02-14 19:42:00 UTC

In case you want to make the Control Prompt a canonical interlude:

"… if you want," Apecian began. "… but comfy enough." Michael walked further into the room, turning to get the best view of it.
A new protagonist (Michael) should get a new paragraph, especially when it's not just one move he does before Apecian continues speaking, and this is one of your longest paragraphs anyway.

It was as Apecian had said, though he had neglected to mention a few thing,...
Should be "things" (plural).

HG

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