Subject: Congrats! :D *tosses Spikes*
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Posted on: 2017-02-11 13:49:00 UTC
Best of luck with your first mission, Sir Granz! I took one look at the fic and decided that yes, it deserves nothing less than the old one-two, PPC style. I'll be happy to beta it once it's done, too - even if for the time being, my knowledge of FMA is virtually nil. XD
Sincerely and with best regards,
Your pleasantly surprised and extremely proud Dodonut Bird advisor!
After much seclusion within the Discord chat and much conversation with my betas, I present to you, oh Most Esteemed Permission Givers, my Request. I must say, I completely ignored the word count recommendations, and I apologize for this.
My agent bios:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1a2G0Dm2VQQe79uq1rU5xspnzO4cySOjxJ-aoDr5IGY/edit?usp=sharing
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GpIoRkjnh9a1Y9OFFrm9jd6QKCIYYvgYJ2iMf0HI/edit?usp=sharing">https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GpIoRkjnh9a1Y9OFFrm9jd6QKCIYYvgYJ2iMf0HI/edit?usp=sharing
My control prompt:
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Mvjcodke2wWvGQpd3a6qLsuY9gVxLhwQIEnIqYj0/edit?usp=sharing">https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Mvjcodke2wWvGQpd3a6qLsuY9gVxLhwQIEnIqY_j0/edit?usp=sharing
My random prompt (1-2-1):
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nF1gD00RbrC73QYqSaRjJNQ-aXhQ8Rtc0sS3PmJJRSw/edit?usp=sharing
I thank the most estimable Larfen J. Stocke, esq, Storme Hawk, SkarmorySilver, Calliope, and DCCCV. I thank you all for all your contributions.
For my first badfic, I have my sights set on this: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11726234/1/Sweet-Dreams-Otaku
Either genuinely terrible or a terrible parody, but either way, drek. Charges include overuse of capitalization, particularly in the chapter titles, misunderstanding of the connotations of certain Japanese words, driving canons out of character, misunderstanding Mary Sues as a whole, driving canons out of character, being a total brat, irritating and pointless Author's Note's, driving canons out of character, a seeming hatred of dialogue tags, and, of course, driving canons out of character. Replacement may figure into it, but it will require a tad more assessment.
In case you want to make the Control Prompt a canonical interlude:
"… if you want," Apecian began. "… but comfy enough." Michael walked further into the room, turning to get the best view of it.
A new protagonist (Michael) should get a new paragraph, especially when it's not just one move he does before Apecian continues speaking, and this is one of your longest paragraphs anyway.
It was as Apecian had said, though he had neglected to mention a few thing,...
Should be "things" (plural).
HG
Your agents have been awesome in Rudi's, you really deserve this!
What? I even brought a stamp.
...Fine, I'll do this the proper way.
Do I know you? Oh yeah. I seen you in Discord, like, all the time. I've bounced ideas off you (I trust you enough to be a story adviser; does this mean I trust you with your own? Heck yes.), I've RPed with your characters. I got to watch them develop as you readied for Permission. I like 'em. You got plans to rein in their more OP sides. Gold star.
Can you write? You got betas. Good show. I've seen your unedited RP posts and you know how to do SPaG there, too. And your prompts and bios look solid; there were a few punctuation errors, but nothing major aside from using carrot brackets to show your characters thinking. They're not Andalites; use italics instead, for thoughts and for the Flowers. Flowers don't use quotations for their speech. Make sure to italicize those continua, too. :) Basically, SPaG is mostly good, and nothing that a beta or two can't catch.
As for storytelling, I think you're good. The control prompt was a bit lacking in funny, but it was engaging nonetheless, and it was a nice showing of how your agents met.
The second prompt was better; I laughed when Apecian fell in the Floating Hyacinth's tank.
And the fic to spork: I took one look and NOPEd out. I think we're done here.
*takes out sword and taps your shoulders* It is my duty and honor to announce Sir Granz, Knight of Plort!,
Eh? Eh? Guys... am I right?
(Barbara Dunkelman laughs in the background)
Thank you, Barb!
Anyway, a bunch o' Conga Rats for you, mate!
Have this celebratory Outer God-summoning portal. Who knows, that could be useful.
Best of luck with your first mission, Sir Granz! I took one look at the fic and decided that yes, it deserves nothing less than the old one-two, PPC style. I'll be happy to beta it once it's done, too - even if for the time being, my knowledge of FMA is virtually nil. XD
Sincerely and with best regards,
Your pleasantly surprised and extremely proud Dodonut Bird advisor!
The Monarchs Awaken!
Let me give you this self-updating guidebook of all the deathtraps in the multiverse.
Have a nice and long spin-off, Granz.
Glad to see that you have finally got Permission!
To be honest, when I saw you in your times at Discord, I knew that you would definitely earn your Permission like a true and proper author. You have helped me with a few things in my fanfic, and for that, I give you my thanks.
Anyway, enjoy your permission, and have fun being a official member of the PPC. I'll be doing my best to earn my place among them, as soon as I gain the confidence and skill to apply for Permission, but in my eyes, you'll be one of the better ones, no matter what happens.
Well done! As we've all been saying, you had nothing to worry about.
So, because Larfen wouldn't let me live it down if I didn't say it, Congranzulations.
You got it!
I knew it! I bloody knew it!
You swept in like a freight train on wings with a mallet attachment and smashed it and got permission!
I knew it! I bloody knew it!
See, this is why I married you, Granz. This is why our marriage is an actual thing that happened for real in reality.
You deserve it, mate.
Yeeeeeeeeeah maaaaaate
If it helps, I think it's good as granted. Ticks all the marks, and it's entertaining. Nicely done.
Good bloody luck, mate.
Get permission or not, know that I still reckon you're a bloody good writer, at the end of it. Plenty of us do, in fact! Least, in the Discord, where all that RP stuff is.
Good luck, Granz! Good luck.