Subject: That sort of explains it
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Posted on: 2016-10-26 01:25:00 UTC
Maybe just drop in a mention of it healing any disease or injury? I guess I just didn't jump from that to "it'll cure lycanthropy."
Subject: That sort of explains it
Author:
Posted on: 2016-10-26 01:25:00 UTC
Maybe just drop in a mention of it healing any disease or injury? I guess I just didn't jump from that to "it'll cure lycanthropy."
Ix and Charlotte provide some constructive criticism to a Peter and the Starcatchers OC.
Short mission, I know, but it was also a short fic. I'm a bit nervous if the length affected how well I was able to tell the story, so concrit would be really appreciated.
I liked the fact this mission staged more scenes between Ix and Lottie, and I'll admit that I find refreshing to see an ending where death of a glitterbag isn't involved, or rather a scene where there is hope that there won't be a glitterbag at the end.
And... I'm curious about that last scene. I don't know this fandom, so I'll admit that in the dark here.
I have to say, I envy Ix's access to PPC technology...
Overall, I thought the mission was good, and it's nice to see a more constructive approach to PPC missioning, as well as an affirmation that not all OCs are Sues. The only real criticism I have is that the ending seems like a bit sudden, especially if you're not familiar with the canon. Maybe an earlier mention of what starstuff does would be helpful for those of us who are unfamiliar with it?
Maybe just drop in a mention of it healing any disease or injury? I guess I just didn't jump from that to "it'll cure lycanthropy."