Subject: Notes and review
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Posted on: 2017-10-06 17:26:00 UTC
- Lotte being all concerned about Ix is cute
- Shame about the hair
- Nice of Charlotte to go get the brace. Shame that's about to get nurfed into the ground
- re: thirst, Ix's gift for understatement again?
- Extra comma in “Just so long as you promise to eat some, yourself,”?
- I like the snuggling scene
- That was a nice bit of tension, where Ix started going for the human blood
- I like the description of the disguise shift, though I do want to know how Charlotte pronounced the exclamation mark in 'vampire!me'
- "I always did tell you you were hot"... . That was a funny line
- Ix has a lot of good points about the morph there
- "You have a promising career as a chinrest." was also a funny line
- "If you die out there, I'll kill you"
- I like Ix's solution. It seems like the right response to this sort of thing.
-inb4 the Flowers hassle them about postmortem charging
- (agent!}Ix, you don't need to apologize for everything. (referring to Ix's reaction to Charlotte's reaction to the execution method)
- "lept off the sofa like she'd been tasered" is good description
- The ending is nice, in general
Review, broadly:
Was good. What I personally liked the best were the Charlotte/Ix relationship parts. The balance between that sort of thing and fic-missioning was reasonable.
Sudden thought: will Charlotte go into an Andalite-style food craze post morph?
- Tomash