Subject: There's a Time Lord with some dog tags who wants a word... (nm)
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Posted on: 2017-10-05 14:34:00 UTC
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New mission! by
on 2017-10-05 04:02:00 UTC
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As Charlotte's deal with the Flowers comes closer to an end, she and Ix are sent against a ridiculously overpowered Twilight Sue.
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Notes and review by
on 2017-10-06 17:26:00 UTC
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- Lotte being all concerned about Ix is cute
- Shame about the hair
- Nice of Charlotte to go get the brace. Shame that's about to get nurfed into the ground
- re: thirst, Ix's gift for understatement again?
- Extra comma in “Just so long as you promise to eat some, yourself,”?
- I like the snuggling scene
- That was a nice bit of tension, where Ix started going for the human blood
- I like the description of the disguise shift, though I do want to know how Charlotte pronounced the exclamation mark in 'vampire!me'
- "I always did tell you you were hot"... . That was a funny line
- Ix has a lot of good points about the morph there
- "You have a promising career as a chinrest." was also a funny line
- "If you die out there, I'll kill you"
- I like Ix's solution. It seems like the right response to this sort of thing.
-inb4 the Flowers hassle them about postmortem charging
- (agent!}Ix, you don't need to apologize for everything. (referring to Ix's reaction to Charlotte's reaction to the execution method)
- "lept off the sofa like she'd been tasered" is good description
- The ending is nice, in general
Review, broadly:
Was good. What I personally liked the best were the Charlotte/Ix relationship parts. The balance between that sort of thing and fic-missioning was reasonable.
Sudden thought: will Charlotte go into an Andalite-style food craze post morph?
- Tomash
- Lotte being all concerned about Ix is cute
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Response by
on 2017-10-06 20:59:00 UTC
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The extra comma was intentional; if someone who can explain the grammar rules to me about why my brain goes "yes this should be here" that would be great. ^^;
Charlotte's eaten food-food while in disguise before, so she at least knows what to expect with that. I'm already in the middle of her central interlude, so things are going to get interesting between her and Ix in the future.I hope -
I really enjoyed that! by
on 2017-10-05 13:53:00 UTC
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It was a fun read, though some of it really made me think: what happens when Charlotte has to realize that she isn't going to be invincible as a human? What happens when she rushes in and gets torn apart and doesn't come back? Because she's got into some seriously bad habits when it comes to Suvian takedown tactics, and it's frankly worrying that Ix hasn't brought her up on it even once.
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Ix is... trying. by
on 2017-10-05 14:10:00 UTC
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The last interlude I published with them showed her attempting to teach Charlotte some combat skills, but Charlotte's blowing her off. After all, once she's out of ESAS, there's no need to worry about getting ripped apart anymore, right?
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... At least it will make for funny writing opportunities? by
on 2017-10-05 20:29:00 UTC
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For a given value of funny, of course.
Nice story, and the puff of logic so satisfying to see in action. -
There's a Time Lord with some dog tags who wants a word... (nm) by
on 2017-10-05 14:34:00 UTC
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