This is mostly for the notice of Neshomeh, as I know you are working on the 'Sue catagory pages at the moment.

I put the page up because, as far as I know, no other 'Sue has managed to partially assimilate themself with their own bad logic, lack of description and plot-warping power. There are also more badfics involving him waiting to be sporked, across various continua, and hermione of vulcan seconded the idea of building a page for him.

I have not yet added him to any catagories, to minimise interference.

The page link is here:

http://ppc.wikia.com/wiki/CaptainJackRussel

Please tell me what you think.

I've been reading these in between work shifts, so I likely won't remember everything I had wanted to say, so . . . in a chaotic ball of free association, here are my thoughts and corrections:

To start on a general note, something you've done super-well is setting things up way in advance, and making everything run together. This goes back to your first mission, where you introduced Eagrus' distaste for technology, and the malfunctioning of the disguise generator in the "Mulan and Shang 300" mission. Both of those pay off down the line, with Cyba's Borgification and the Borg-heavy Star Trek mission. The same goes for replacement!Shang in the first Mulan mission calling the agents Huns, and turning that into a running gag. These sorts of things give your spinoff some real glue between the installments, and help it flow better as a long-running story.

As for other things I liked, I liked that the mini-Colossi have such strong personalities, and interact with both agents as well the console frequently and in different ways. You made good use of the comma storm to unite the Mulan missions. (And also to keep the disparate Ancient China and modern day bits together. Seriously. Talk about clashing cultures.)

I super muchly loved the Star Trek mission! That piece, while taking the call-forwards from the other missions I already mentioned, was particularly cohesive in and of itself. I especially loved the focus you put on the Borg culture, and how you turned the Sue's descriptions and actions back on himself at the end. Part 2 had my absolute favorite bit, where the Borg's hive mind started infecting Cyba's mind (and Cyba cubed's minds). This majorly underscored the real threat the Borg poses in the Trekverse, and contradicts the account of them presented by the Sue, which is the sort of thing I love in PPC missions: giving the canon a chance to show its stuff after being degraded by the original fic's bad writing.

And now mistakes I found! (Apologies if these have already been pointed out, but I can't stay up any longer to read all the comments.)

Mulan and Shang 300

""Don't sat tha-" Eagrus was too late." (say instead of sat)

Fas Mulan: I just wanted to point out "Fa" is the family name given for Mulan's family in the Disney movie. You seemed a bit confused by it (as was I, when I encountered it in my own claim to these mini-fics. :s )

Between the lines, ""We have to wait that long?"" and ""Oh no," Eagrus corrected her." the font you're using changes.

Parenthood

" . . . to encourage yet another immanent punctuation storm." (imminent instead of immanent)

" . . . heard the terracotta soldier say, now moderately discernibly." (two adverbs in a row, lol)

Parenthood 2

Alright, alright, we're coming!" cried Eagrus. (missing opening quotation mark)

Untitled 1

" . . . trying to her mind off her destination..." (missed a verb)

Love and War part 1

Another font change here, between ""Since when would Kes and Seska faint over a dog-man?!" pointed out Cyba furiously."" and ""Oh look, he wants to come 'abored'," snickered Eagrus."

Love and War part 2

" . . . snapped the trio of Cybas in unison. "Then they exchanged glares . . ." (Oh look! The missing quotation mark from "Parenthood 2!" (: )

"Sigma cuffed him with her metal arm . . ." (This isn't a typo so much, but the sentence before this one had Eagrus off-handedly referring to the Borg as monsters, so when I started reading this one, I assumed (based on Cyba-cubed's increasing protectiveness of the Borg) that Sigma was hitting Eagrus until I got farther into the sentence. You might want to rewrite this sentence a bit to make it more obvious that it's the Sue getting socked.)

All right, these are my edits and comments, in chronological order.
Part 1
-I love the beginning bit with Cyba dancing. Imagining all her lines in the voice of the Collective made me crack up.
-"With guess which species?" should probably be "As guess which species?"
-Keep them mini-Tribbles just so you can keep the scene where one lands on Eagrus's head. :)
- "It wouldn't be fair on the Borg" should probably be "It wouldn't be fair to the Borg". And I agree with Cyba on that. :)
-I don't think you put "Kasons" and "Kason" on the mini list. It's Kazon, plural Kazon.
-Cyba and Eagrus discuss the section of text including "Time to dye" later than where you put it, so maybe you should move it.
-I'm not sure if this is intentional or not, but the CAD says "Katherine Janeway" instead of "Kathryn Janeway" and "immanent" instead of "imminent". Could be Jack Russel's bad spelling affecting the CAD, though.
-"Russel/Seska/Squick" doesn't need the second slash.
Part 2
-I love the paper airplanes. "We are the PPC. Resistance is futile." I usually refrain from internet slang, but ROFL!
-I want to see Cyba chase her own eye laser. It would be HILARIOUS!
-The Borg are OOC, not OC. I think that happened twice.
-Several times, you use non-speech modifiers as speech modifiers, like "smiled", "stared", or "grinned". I didn't find it detracted much from my enjoyment of the story, but I just though you should be aware.
-"We're ladies," grinned the three Cybas." That comment seemed kind of random to me. Also, not a speech modifier.
-Poor Eagrus, having to deal with the Collective of Three. It's awesome, though. I like how they could sort of pick up the Collective's signals, but they still sort of keep their own personalities. A hilarious side to the Borg.
Overall, I liked it a lot. Yes, Jack Russel deserves a wiki page, since the author wrote more stories with him (I claim the other Trekverse one, pending permission, of course). In fact, he might be an multiverse emergency.

Chapter 2: 2 minis, Zouh (adopted by Eagrus) and Emporer.
Chapter 3: 1 child for the nursery, Miley.
Chapter 4: 1 mini-Bit, Ling She (looks like a little Chinese guy, except grey and faded).
Chapter 5:
Recruits (5): Bri'Aunna, Yoa, Miley, Will, Elizabeth.
Nursery: two unnamed daughters and however many children Will and Elizabeth have (unspecified).
Loot: 1 talking gate (dibs placed by Eagrus) and one neckless (dibs placed by Cyba).
Chapter 6:
Minis: 22
Mini-Tribbles (17): Turok, Turock, Torries, Voyger, voyger, voger, borg, borge, Buge, Kilngon, Paries, Arry Kim, Caprtin Janeway, caprtin Janeway, Captin Janeway, altha qudrant, Ensin Ryan.
Mini-Rancor: hislight saber
Mini-Tanks: Left for Dead and Loius
Mini-'Stus: Caprt Jack Russel and Captin Jack Russel (both taken for training by Phi)
Loot: 1 'rocket luncher' (must be an anti-rocket shield of some description), 2 'laseryer guns' (say 'yer' when fired), 1 lightsaber (dibs placed by Eagrus), 1 long black captain's coat (dibs placed by Cyba), 1 default-sci-fi spaceship (to be delivered to DoSAT).
Recruits: Sertana

Okay, so this might be a bit lengthy, but these are some important points that I wanted to... er... point out.

Chapter 3
Only one major note here, and it's the way this line is written: Then she shut the portal, missing Eagrus' eye-roll as soon as her back was turned.

My smaller note is that Eagrus' eye-roll should be Eagrus's eye-roll; despite the fact that Eagrus ends with an 's', the eye-roll still belongs to him, and this should be reflected with an apostrophe-s rather than just a plain apostrophe.

The larger note is the way the sentence is worded. As it is, the line makes it sound as though Cyba didn't miss Eagrus's eye-roll until she turned her back; a better way to write this sentence might have been something like this: Then she turned and shut the portal, giving Eagrus the chance to roll his eyes without her noticing.

Chapter 4
My only problem here is that one of your conversations came dangerously close to being too confusing to sort out who was saying what: "Where did you get that?"

"I bodged it up while you were being subjected to the No Drool Videos."

"Riiiight... Oh, and Cyba, don't challenge the IO! It'll come back to bite you!"

"And you know what...I'm in a good mood and I DON'T CARE! BRING IT ON!"

"I don't know why I'm going to go on this mission with you, Cyba, but I'm increasingly sure I'm going to regret it."

"I'm hyper, crazy - and the IO is not going to stop that. Not today! HAHAHA!"

"We're doomed..."

The only reason I didn't lose track of who was speaking was that Eagrus kept calling Cyba by name, which strikes me as a touch 'scripted', but that could just be the way he talks.

While it's okay to have a few lines written without identifying the speaker (as long as there are only two speakers, or there are several voices speaking at once and the narration needs to reflect a sense of all-at-once chaos), I find that more than a line or two per unidentified speaker begins to feel like a script with no specified characters - not only is the dialogue confusing after that point, but foreshadowing and personality quirks mentioned by a character during such a conversation may not stick with the reader as well as it would if the speakers were identified quickly enough to prevent any confusion, which can take away from the story a bit.

Now for the Nicer Stuff!
I really liked the fact that the wraiths possessing Mulan and Shang kept noticing the agents. I made an apple cider-drinking game of it. We're out of cider, now.

And I'm fairly certain this is the first time I've ever seen an agent wage war with the Ironic Overpower. It was equal parts terrifying and hilarious.

Your mentions of Sar-Plasm made me curious, so I went on the Wiki and read the other mission where it's mentioned ('Of Sar-Plasm, Sue Pies, and other Affairs of the Organs...'). I'm sad there's not a Wiki page for the stuff; it seems under-loved. Someone should correct this! -raises hand to volunteer-

Anyway, all in all, great missions! I giggled nonstop while I was reading them, and that's a good thing. :D