Subject: I read this!
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Posted on: 2019-06-29 14:19:00 UTC

A couple days ago now, so I'm afraid my thoughts on it have faded, but I enjoyed it. The meeting of one canon's worldview with another is always fun, and Zaphoriel studiously trying to figure things out with little to no help from Faust is good stuff. I think the concept of little men living inside the electronic devices was mentioned to me at some point, and it's still very funny. Also the blue (or purple) smoke being a special atmosphere that keeps them alive. Don't let the blue smoke out, seriously! {X D

I hope these characters get to the Discworld and meet some camera imps and such down the road. ^_^

As for crit, I DO recall that there's one instance where Zaphoriel is referred to as Zaph toward the end, which struck me as odd since it only happens the once and I don't think the characters are on nickname basis yet.

Also, I'm not sure I follow the internal logic of when Faust is amused at Zaphoriel's discomfort and happy to increase it, and when he feels sorry for the other guy. Is it supposed to be essentially based on whim/mood?

~Neshomeh

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