Thoughts by
Tomash
on 2020-01-30 07:04:19 UTC
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(I couldn't get to this earlier because deadlines)
- One line I'm slightly confused by was "How was the mission report?" I think I can sort of tell what's meant there but I'm not sure.
- It's nice to see the mention that things are improving.
- Caps issue in: “What the hell?” She asked faintly
- The clipping and other visual issues are a nice touch
- Reality room, nice touch for dealing with superpowered folks
- Ok, now I get the line about the report. You might've wanted "How's the mission report going?"
Overall, this is a nice short mission that does a good job of showing off the issues in this fic. It still manages to have some nice character interactions, though it's hard to fit in a bunch of those into a short work like this.
Wow... by
Good Mod Addict
on 2020-01-22 21:00:31 UTC
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... I don't tend to read many fics that abuse punctuation that badly. My eyes just glaze over.
I know about a hundred other people have said this already, but good work on characters T-posing to assert dominance over the canon. I also appreciated the use of a Reality Room to finish the mission; "then Liz stabbed them some more" is a really funny line, considering how short the mission (and the fic) were.
One thing I would nitpick about is the dialogue; a few times, I had trouble keeping track of who was speaking. A lot of that is probably just because it's a new spinoff with new characters,so I'm not used to how they talk yet. However, I would have liked to see Avery and Liz physically doing a little more while they're commenting on the fic.
Re: mission by
doctorlit
on 2020-01-19 17:07:36 UTC
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You, uh. You sure discovered a series of words inside that story, yep. Wow.
I didn't really comment on it in the earlier Miraculous Ladybug mission, but I like that pretty font you use to show how the adverse Akumas display their names. I love how their color schemes emulate the characters they're named for (I assume). Feels like somebody should draw some—but not me. Someone who can draw well and reasonable quickly.
I like your use of bad CGI graphics and treating the characters as game models as concrete ways of showing how the spelling and sentence structure were warping the World. I also enjoyed the hilariously simple way Avery tricked the Sues into walking through a portal.
—doctorlit has no typo list for this one
Nice mission! by
Ozzielot
on 2020-01-17 20:29:04 UTC
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I like that the badfic is described like it's using bad CGI.
T- posing parents and... T-posing parents, oh my! by
Cicada
on 2020-01-17 19:21:10 UTC
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I really enjoyed the mission! The glitchiness is a fun take on bad SPaG, and the execution made me chuckle. A perfect mix of satisfying and humorous.