Subject: Nitpickiness
Author:
Posted on: 2012-09-22 22:48:00 UTC
You left the betas' comments in the piece. This is slightly not aesthetic.
-
Mission Report by
on 2012-09-22 19:11:00 UTC
Reply
It's finally finished! Here it is, in all of its 13,000-plus word glory! PLEASEpleasepleaseplease concrit.
/gets on knees and begs
This Mission is slightly NSFW, violence and language-wise. The original fic is quite NSFW, but for very different reasons.
Part 1: https://docs.google.com/document/d/13MtzIN2frTPPjdEMGTlXiZ4bAiMDHziD6Lv86r8Zk4w/edit
Part 2: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LsErzHsbObNJl6czDKmNRCIIOSggkQikdBQounAR8uk/edit
Original Fic (NSFW):http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1606924/1/The-Greatest-Love
Credit where it's due: Thanks to LilacLielac for finding the fic and leading us in writing the mission, to KittyNoodles for putting her Agents (and sanity) in the line of fire alongside ours, to Crimson Flight for Beta-ing Part 1 and participating in Part 2, and to StarAlbatross for Beta-ing both. -
Added the mission to the front page of the wiki. by
on 2012-09-23 05:15:00 UTC
Reply
Am looking to see where else it needs to be added (Riese, can you link both parts on your agents' pages?)
-
...Aaand done. by
on 2012-09-23 07:05:00 UTC
Reply
By the way, you need to go ahead and make Agent pages. You too, Lilac. And Crimson, as well.
-
You sure? by
on 2012-09-23 08:27:00 UTC
Reply
I thought only people with Permission could create agent pages - co-writes or not. That's why I've been holding off.
-
Urrum. by
on 2012-09-23 09:21:00 UTC
Reply
I'd say since they've appeared in a PPC-canon piece, they're now part of PPC canon whether you're allowed to use them by themselves or not. So they need pages.
hS -
'Kay. Thankies. (nm) by
on 2012-09-23 17:51:00 UTC
Reply
-
mhmm (nm) by
on 2012-09-23 06:56:00 UTC
Reply
-
I know nothing of Bionicle by
on 2012-09-23 02:05:00 UTC
Reply
Except for the fact that no, they don't have any reproductive organs, so this makes exactly -31425 degrees of sense.
*Snickers* Really, guys, there's nothing to be mad about, the only things that have changed in this universe besides you being made of metal are your voices.
I liked the pacing, and despite the fact that you brought agents who aren't used to each other in on it, they still managed to work as a well-rounded team. It got like a crazy bionicle agent smash party around the end.
And now I really want to know what happens when the Joan of Arc sword that Mike has does it's thing. You know, the thing that you had to be there to see. -
Well... by
on 2012-09-23 03:00:00 UTC
Reply
You'll probably find out at some point. I have plans for Mike, yes I do...
Anyway, the reason I didn't show what happened (apart from the fact that NOT showing it meant I could have funny dialogue instead) is that, relative to how she would be in a Nasuverse fic, Joan is honestly not that impressive. She's very limited in terms of what she can afford to do, because she doesn't have access to a power source. If I ever do a Nasu fic, I'll probably write the full combat.
(On the DOWN side, I now have to live up to expectations of awesome. Bugger.) -
On the subject of Mike... by
on 2012-09-23 04:57:00 UTC
Reply
Gilbert is still terribly scarred. Terribly. He suffers nightmares due to what happened.
-
-snerk- by
on 2012-09-23 06:55:00 UTC
Reply
I don't see why. Her Noble Phantasm isn't particularly horrifying or anything...or were you referring to the...creative...way she dealt with their uncanonical bits?
-
Re: -snerk- by
on 2012-09-23 08:28:00 UTC
Reply
I was referring to the neuter-by-flaming-sword that Gilbert watched, yes.
-
Gilbert would like to disagree with you. by
on 2012-09-23 02:34:00 UTC
Reply
According to him, the very idea that he is female is what was so bad about it. He's rather fond of his gender.
...That sounded better in my head... -
Is sense-making at least! by
on 2012-09-24 21:20:00 UTC
Reply
If to be considered very silly by Maggie and Tanya, because while they're comfortable with the culture-default gender that comes with their XX chromosomes, they're also completely blasé about changing it for mission purposes. Also, one of the two just made a 'you and your quaint little categories' comment in an eerily accurate imitation of Jack Harkness. I think it was Tanya.
-
Very sense-making. by
on 2012-09-24 23:27:00 UTC
Reply
Gilbert is still recovering from a nasty headache - have you ever seen a dragon-egg? It's like a goose-egg, but bigger and dark purple.
Fiona is cackling at the categories quote. -
Have you been listening to the voices in your head again? (nm) by
on 2012-09-24 21:45:00 UTC
Reply
-
'Course I do! They have good suggestions for Sue deaths. :D (nm) by
on 2012-09-24 21:48:00 UTC
Reply
-
Nitpickiness by
on 2012-09-22 22:48:00 UTC
Reply
You left the betas' comments in the piece. This is slightly not aesthetic.
-
Gack! Must fix... (nm) by
on 2012-09-23 02:26:00 UTC
Reply
-
Extra nitpickiness. by
on 2012-09-23 09:25:00 UTC
Reply
You've given us a version people can leave comments on. So that's gonna keep on happening...
For my GDocs, I usually use the File>Publish to the Web... option rather than straight sharing it. It stops all those commenty things, and gets rid of the toolbar at the top, too.
Assuming you remember to use the published link rather than the editable-version link. I often forget that.
hS - I think I've managed to publish Part One. by on 2012-09-23 18:18:00 UTC Reply
-
Thanks, you two. (nm) by
on 2012-09-23 19:47:00 UTC
Reply
-
New Version of Part 2 by
on 2012-09-23 11:14:00 UTC
Reply
https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=1LsErzHsbObNJl6czDKmNRCIIOSggkQikdBQounAR8uk
I took the liberty of publishing the second part to the web for the others. Only the second part, because I wasn't in Part 1. -
Thankies, Crim! -hugs- (nm) by
on 2012-09-23 18:15:00 UTC
Reply
-
It's Over! by
on 2012-09-22 21:14:00 UTC
Reply
Aaaaaaaaugh I'm not doing another mission until I ask for Permission. Six chapters should be short, not two-part worthy! Owie...
-
... by
on 2012-09-22 21:13:00 UTC
Reply
This is that BIONICLE slash!rape!fic, right? My morbid curiosity demands that I read this.
-
That's the one! by
on 2012-09-22 21:24:00 UTC
Reply
We left the NSFW bits out of the mission (they happened off-screen, as it were), so it shouldn't be too bad...
-
Take all the Bleepka you can get a hold of when you do. (nm) by
on 2012-09-22 21:15:00 UTC
Reply