Subject: New Version of Part 2
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Posted on: 2012-09-23 11:14:00 UTC
https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=1LsErzHsbObNJl6czDKmNRCIIOSggkQikdBQounAR8uk
I took the liberty of publishing the second part to the web for the others. Only the second part, because I wasn't in Part 1.
It's finally finished! Here it is, in all of its 13,000-plus word glory! PLEASEpleasepleaseplease concrit.
/gets on knees and begs
This Mission is slightly NSFW, violence and language-wise. The original fic is quite NSFW, but for very different reasons.
Part 1: https://docs.google.com/document/d/13MtzIN2frTPPjdEMGTlXiZ4bAiMDHziD6Lv86r8Zk4w/edit
Part 2: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LsErzHsbObNJl6czDKmNRCIIOSggkQikdBQounAR8uk/edit
Original Fic (NSFW):http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1606924/1/The-Greatest-Love
Credit where it's due: Thanks to LilacLielac for finding the fic and leading us in writing the mission, to KittyNoodles for putting her Agents (and sanity) in the line of fire alongside ours, to Crimson Flight for Beta-ing Part 1 and participating in Part 2, and to StarAlbatross for Beta-ing both.
Am looking to see where else it needs to be added (Riese, can you link both parts on your agents' pages?)
By the way, you need to go ahead and make Agent pages. You too, Lilac. And Crimson, as well.
I thought only people with Permission could create agent pages - co-writes or not. That's why I've been holding off.
I'd say since they've appeared in a PPC-canon piece, they're now part of PPC canon whether you're allowed to use them by themselves or not. So they need pages.
hS
Except for the fact that no, they don't have any reproductive organs, so this makes exactly -31425 degrees of sense.
*Snickers* Really, guys, there's nothing to be mad about, the only things that have changed in this universe besides you being made of metal are your voices.
I liked the pacing, and despite the fact that you brought agents who aren't used to each other in on it, they still managed to work as a well-rounded team. It got like a crazy bionicle agent smash party around the end.
And now I really want to know what happens when the Joan of Arc sword that Mike has does it's thing. You know, the thing that you had to be there to see.
You'll probably find out at some point. I have plans for Mike, yes I do...
Anyway, the reason I didn't show what happened (apart from the fact that NOT showing it meant I could have funny dialogue instead) is that, relative to how she would be in a Nasuverse fic, Joan is honestly not that impressive. She's very limited in terms of what she can afford to do, because she doesn't have access to a power source. If I ever do a Nasu fic, I'll probably write the full combat.
(On the DOWN side, I now have to live up to expectations of awesome. Bugger.)
Gilbert is still terribly scarred. Terribly. He suffers nightmares due to what happened.
I don't see why. Her Noble Phantasm isn't particularly horrifying or anything...or were you referring to the...creative...way she dealt with their uncanonical bits?
I was referring to the neuter-by-flaming-sword that Gilbert watched, yes.
According to him, the very idea that he is female is what was so bad about it. He's rather fond of his gender.
...That sounded better in my head...
If to be considered very silly by Maggie and Tanya, because while they're comfortable with the culture-default gender that comes with their XX chromosomes, they're also completely blasé about changing it for mission purposes. Also, one of the two just made a 'you and your quaint little categories' comment in an eerily accurate imitation of Jack Harkness. I think it was Tanya.
Gilbert is still recovering from a nasty headache - have you ever seen a dragon-egg? It's like a goose-egg, but bigger and dark purple.
Fiona is cackling at the categories quote.
You left the betas' comments in the piece. This is slightly not aesthetic.
You've given us a version people can leave comments on. So that's gonna keep on happening...
For my GDocs, I usually use the File>Publish to the Web... option rather than straight sharing it. It stops all those commenty things, and gets rid of the toolbar at the top, too.
Assuming you remember to use the published link rather than the editable-version link. I often forget that.
hS
https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=1LsErzHsbObNJl6czDKmNRCIIOSggkQikdBQounAR8uk
I took the liberty of publishing the second part to the web for the others. Only the second part, because I wasn't in Part 1.
Aaaaaaaaugh I'm not doing another mission until I ask for Permission. Six chapters should be short, not two-part worthy! Owie...
This is that BIONICLE slash!rape!fic, right? My morbid curiosity demands that I read this.
We left the NSFW bits out of the mission (they happened off-screen, as it were), so it shouldn't be too bad...