Subject: A few notes
Posted on: 2021-06-20 20:30:08 UTC

My main note was that I got a bit lost in the "new student" bit, and it seemed like there were excessive italics, but the story was understandable with that confusion. I also needed to give the "on his back trying to get up" line a re-read, since it was something of a garden path sentence for me.

Overall, I don't have particularly strong thoughts on this interlude, but I thought I should at least reply that I've read it.

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