re: mission part 2 (spoilers) by
doctorlit
on 2022-06-01 12:25:15 UTC
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Oh, interesting! We don't see missions combine very often. I'm instantly suspicious of this Helena; it's not exactly common for background OCs to break out of Suefluence. I winder, if the two stories badfics described a similar character, would they both become the same character? That would make Helena more aware of the fourth wall, and explain the two fics linking with each other.
Hope no one forgets about the original Suvian still being tied up!
(edited to add this, because I forgot:)
For this one sentence: "She was instantly replied by three loud startled screams." "Replied" can't really be used this way in English. A common way to rephrase this would be, "She was instantly met with three loud startled screams." If you don't like the sound of that, you can try rephrasing the sentence a bit, something like, "As reply, she instantly received three loud, startled screams."
—doctorlit, second star to the right and straight on 'til work shift
[spoilers] While we're at it, by
Kі nо Shirayuki
on 2022-05-25 23:40:57 UTC
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I shall introduce my theory for what happens to multiple badfics taking place in the same event: instance theory. For those familiar with MMORPGs, many games have what are called "instanced" maps, in which there are multiple copies of the map and each player visiting that map is on a copy, thus will not see other players also there. I'd like to imagine that each badfic takes place in an instance of the original canon, and if left untreated will start to "merge" with the canon instance. In many cases the badfic instances end up "merging" together, leading to what happens in the mission up there; whether one badfic can "see" another badfic depends on this "merging".
Interesting. by
Linstar
on 2022-05-25 13:47:37 UTC
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(Warning: Spoilers!)
This is a good twist. I like that the Word Worlds collided. But maybe you could’ve shown a bit more of the badfics? I was a tad confused for a bit.
The description “stranger fairy Helena” just seems really awkward to me. Maybe “the stranger, a fairy called Helena” would be better?
I thought that the paragraph where the prose explained what happened could have perhaps shown a little more.
Anyway, I liked, exited to see the next part.
—Ls