Subject: Thoughts
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Posted on: 2022-06-24 03:39:08 UTC

  • The fast beginning works here, it seems like
  • I like the effect of the capital letters
  • It's neat that the mission starts by noting things aren't that bad
  • Also, 'ice lord' :)
  • I didn't quite follow why both agents had moments where they spaced out before the charge scene
  • Over-capitalism is a fantastic charge even if it's not what was meant
  • The thing with the imploding was a nice bit of contrast
  • Re interlude: That was a nice little funny thing

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