Subject: re: mission and interlude
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Posted on: 2022-07-02 12:48:07 UTC

You know, I really, really like Charlie. They're just so very mellow, it almost makes the badfic weirdness more relaxing for me as I read. On another character, Charlie's nonchalance and lack of regard for Jiwon's discomfort, might come off as indifference, or even mockery, but with Charlie, it's so obvious that they really are innocently unperturbed by most of what happens around them, that it just comes off as wholesome. It helps that they always become supportive and caring towards Jiwon once he really starts getting overwhelmed. They make a great partnership!

You had some great badfic imagery in this mission. The big stand-outs were the moments when the canon characters were kind of flopping around in weird positions while trying to act out the scenes. It gave me a strong "Team Fortress mod crappost video" vibe, which looked especially weird, imagining it happen in a Disney CGI setting. The scene where Anna and Elsa were eating at a table with all the other characters standing silently around them like a collection of character models was quite creepy and weird to picture, as well. I also liked the extremely tall library (All that paper wasted on giant books with blank pages? Shameful!), and laughed out loud at the oil-and-chocolate wedding cake just sort of collapsing on itself on the table. It's a well done mission!

I suspect there's a joke I'm missing in the interlude (I have no idea how coffee is made), but I still enjoyed Charlie continuing to be wholesome!

One typo:
"'Got them in position?' Charlie asked, flipping opening the chargelist."
Either "flipping open" or just "opening," I reckon.
(I would also argue that "charge list" ought to be two separate words, but it can be a stylistic thing too, if you like it they way you have it.)

—doctorlit, taking a break from PPC+20 to read actual contemporary missions

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