Subject: Thanks for the comment ☺️ About the scene changes,
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Posted on: 2022-07-23 01:45:57 UTC
Does the boys' mission have the same problem?
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Girls' mission part 2 anyone? by
on 2022-07-21 01:51:25 UTC
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In which the Stu gets even more ridiculous. Gotta give myself some credit for coming up with such a crazy creature 🤣
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Have read, am looking forward to part 3 (nm) by
on 2022-07-26 04:13:31 UTC
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Final part around the corner! by
on 2022-07-25 09:17:35 UTC
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In a situation this perilous, how will the mission turn out?
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re: mission finale (spoilers) by
on 2022-07-26 03:56:03 UTC
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Oh man! Love this! I had a suspicion you were going to cross the two missions over, but it was especially smart to pit the god-playing Suvians against each other, since no one else in the stories would have the power to stop them otherwise. I also love that the alternates of the agents got to make an appearance and protect their other selves! And Fáelán should be an interesting character to watch developing; the idea of a "wizard" wanting to live a more normal life, rather than the reverse scenario, is intriguing.
One thing, though (and I should have brought this up earlier, but I didn't think about it until now): if you're going to construct artificial badfics, I don't think it's right to create minis with them, especially when it involves creating a new mini type. Part of the fun of minis is that they're accidental mistakes, so intentionally engineering them feels like cheating to me. I don't think it's a big deal this time, since Twisted Wonderland isn't a very well-known fandom, but in the future, I would personally prefer you don't that again. Sorry!
—doctorlit, open to disagreement from other oldbies re: fake mini creation
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I disagree. by
on 2022-07-28 15:41:26 UTC
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I think that if a continuum’s fandom is small enough that you can’t find a badfic with minis, then you can create your own. Minis are fun, and besides, it seems unrealistic to have an artificial badfic that has horrible spelling...unless it’s a character’s name, in which case it’s always spelled correctly.
—Ls’ two cents, a bit late
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Merci beaucoup 😉 by
on 2022-07-26 05:04:20 UTC
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He's going to have his own spin off so you can look forward to that 😁
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Yay! by
on 2022-07-25 14:58:13 UTC
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I must say, the way the Sues and Stu were killed...simply wonderful. Bravo.
—Ls
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Have read. by
on 2022-07-22 16:59:24 UTC
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Being on a train for a whole day affords me some time for this!
I'm enjoying this peek into a new canon. The scenes feel a little disconnected, though, and not just the one with the time-skip to the Stu's transformation. Using the game images to accompany scene changes is nice, but don't forget to narrate them, too, especially since not all readers may be able to view images for one reason or another.
Lux being here is really what got me interested in reading this, and I like a lot of how you're writing her. Pointing out that the Stu being male doesn't mean there won't be canon-lusting was much appreciated, and her take on Ursula's sexiness was great. (Like many Disney villains, she's a queer icon, too!) She seems less airheaded than usual, though, and I miss that unfocussed bubbliness to her personality. The part where she gets distracted by the hotness of all the various school uniforms felt the most in-character for her, but it didn't seem to take much effort to get here back on track. IMO, working with Lux should always be both an education and a blissful disaster. {= )
Still, I'll be sure to tune in for part 3!
~Neshomeh, on vacation.
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Thanks for the comment ☺️ About the scene changes, by
on 2022-07-23 01:45:57 UTC
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Does the boys' mission have the same problem?
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re: mission part 2 by
on 2022-07-22 14:21:26 UTC
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I'm enjoying this overly testosterony hyper-male parody you've created! Also, I finally looked up what Overblots look like, so it's easier to picture the minis now.
—doctorlit
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Oh wow. by
on 2022-07-21 17:11:14 UTC
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This is quite the Stu you have there, Yuki. Just...wow. And with some extra of Luxury’s everyone-lusting. Yay.
—Ls is impressed and a little horrified.