Very sweet, and very sad, but in a nice way, if that makes sense. I love how supportive Momoka's dad is! And hey: she got her wish, defeating monsters at the PPC!

—doctorlit, definitely going to bed on time, just . . . just one more thing, come on, just let me get one more thing done, that's all I need bro, one more thing and then I'll go to bed, one more thing, bro, I need it, I

• I had trouble working out what the first sentence was going for, I think you accidentally a word or something
• Yowch, that ending

Is hard to have detailed thoughts on a short piece like this, but, overall, you did a good job producing emotional impact.

I like that Momo’s throwing beans.

—Ls