Subject: I liked this.
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Posted on: 2022-09-14 18:55:49 UTC

Fogg's character is quite amusing and shines through well. It's kinda interesting that there's no badfic text. How are the agents communicating if Fogg doesn't speak Ewok? Wouldn't they give him a Universal Translator? And did you just canonize my theory of Lux's RC. Not sure how to feel about that...

However, there were a few issues I saw.

And so it was dear readers that I find myself upon my birthday setting down to paper the start of a brand new journal.

Needs a comma after "readers".

Who could possibly have missed out the time I married Queen Victoria, or my years time travelling aboard my Nautilus Zeppelin.

Needs a question mark.

With catlike agility I rolled off the desk and, once I had managed to get back to my feet I found myself standing face to flower with the weird creature.

Needs commas after "desk" and "feet".

And for Origins sake find him some clothes.

Needs comma, "Origin's sake".

Everyone we passed seemed to be wearing the same drab jumpsuits, or some variation thereof. How can somebody flounce effectively without a velvet frock coat?

I'm pretty sure that Headquarters doesn't have a that much of a dress code. Essentially, all you need is a flashpatch.

...her gorgeous hair seeming to have a life of it's own...

Wrong "its".

reading Ewok expressions is not my fortè.

There's no accent on "forte".

I realise many of my readers do prefer that I keep these journals at least relatively PG13,

PG-13.

--Ls