That was pretty cool (nm)

I did a thing by Meta on 2022-09-14 07:38:34 UTC Reply

Oh, hello. So one of the reasons that I've been popping in and out with various levels of frequency over the last few years is that I've actually been working on another project, a series of journals from the point of view of the character I've spent the last five years playing. At some point I'll do something with them, but then, a couple of days ago, on a fairly late evening I checked in on the board after a heavy day of journaling and hit upon a curious concept. What would happen if Fogg popped into the PPC.

From the crazed half asleep brain came a ridiculous idea that will likely only amuse me, but I present to you the case of the Gratuitous Crossover

I'm not 100% certain how canon the story is, but maybe one day I'll write it up from Wallis' point of view for a little more context. For now however, I figured I'd share this fun (for me) little story.

That was pretty cool (nm) by Tomash on 2022-09-20 04:14:24 UTC Reply
re: crossover by doctorlit on 2022-09-16 03:44:27 UTC Reply

This is quite an interesting read! We're so used to mission elements, like temporal distortion and lack of description, being talked about in the familiar terms that the PPC uses. But seeing those things get described from the point of view of a character unfamiliar with the tropes and details really sheds a new light on how bizarre missions can get, and how almost cosmic horror-esque some of the word manifestations can be. Fogg is a fun character, a perfect blend of unreliable narrator and narrator who honestly doesn't realize how tacky he is. The recruitment occurred unusually fast, even by the PPC's standards, but I understand such a short story couldn't dwell too long on introductions, plus, it's just a lot funnier this way. I was also amused by the date headings: how the numerical date advances, but the days of the week go wildly off-kilter.

Some maybe errors?
And so it was dear readers, that I find myself upon my birthday setting down to paper the start of a brand new journal.
This sentence contains two tenses!

. . . or when I was worshipped by a god in the Carpathian mountains?
Not sure if this is a mistake or an intentional subversion of the more usual "worshipped as a god." Just wanted to check!

We had been transported into a badfic, a canon world prevented by terrible writing . . .
I don't think that's the word you wanted . . .

That was the point Toni realised that he hadn't been the showers only occupant.
The pronoun gender got swapped, and "shower's" is missing the apostrophe.

As the door closed behind me I did here the woman chastise someone called Wallis for dripping all over the carpet and I wondered if perhaps that was the Ewoks name.
"Ewok's" is missing the apostrophe, and that should be "hear" rather than "here."

—doctorlit had a very fun day tubing down salt river with coworkers, but he is very tired and on his way to a crash soon

Thanks by Meta on 2022-09-16 07:06:05 UTC Reply

Thanks Doc, The actual Fogg Journals (Or as it's officially titled The Completely True and Unexaggerated Adventures of Fogg) leans very heavily into the unreliable narrator trope, and yes every time he time travels the date remains the same (minus the year) but the days of the week of course change. Allows for amusing situations like three terrible Monday's in a row. The best description I've been able to come up with so far is "What if Doctor Who was an incompetent alcoholic."

You're right, some of those where errors and a couple were intentionally, but I've made some of the suggested alterations. Thanks.

I liked this. by Linstar on 2022-09-14 18:55:49 UTC Edited Writing Reply

Fogg's character is quite amusing and shines through well. It's kinda interesting that there's no badfic text. How are the agents communicating if Fogg doesn't speak Ewok? Wouldn't they give him a Universal Translator? And did you just canonize my theory of Lux's RC? Not sure how to feel about that...

However, there were a few issues I saw.

And so it was dear readers that I find myself upon my birthday setting down to paper the start of a brand new journal.

Needs a comma after "readers".

Who could possibly have missed out the time I married Queen Victoria, or my years time travelling aboard my Nautilus Zeppelin.

Needs a question mark.

With catlike agility I rolled off the desk and, once I had managed to get back to my feet I found myself standing face to flower with the weird creature.

Needs commas after "desk" and "feet".

And for Origins sake find him some clothes.

Needs comma, "Origin's sake".

Everyone we passed seemed to be wearing the same drab jumpsuits, or some variation thereof. How can somebody flounce effectively without a velvet frock coat?

I'm pretty sure that Headquarters doesn't have a that much of a dress code. Essentially, all you need is a flashpatch.

...her gorgeous hair seeming to have a life of it's own...

Wrong "its".

reading Ewok expressions is not my fortè.

There's no accent on "forte".

I realise many of my readers do prefer that I keep these journals at least relatively PG13,

PG-13.

--Ls

Simple answer by Meta on 2022-09-14 19:34:43 UTC Reply

Is that they can't communicate, but I have no intention of making them a long time pairing (or at the moment of continuing Fogg with the PPC) so it's not an overt concern. Well, unless I suddenly change my mind.

Thanks for picking up the errors, I shall adjust in the morning.