Subject: I'll try to get a review of the interlude I haven't beta'd, too.
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Posted on: 2024-08-19 19:38:48 UTC
(Stupid me, pressing enter before I was done.)
--Ls
Subject: I'll try to get a review of the interlude I haven't beta'd, too.
Author:
Posted on: 2024-08-19 19:38:48 UTC
(Stupid me, pressing enter before I was done.)
--Ls
When it's done, I'll archive the reviews.
I plan to review the mission above, so I will probably post up there. Will try for mid-week when I have a little more time between cat care drop-ins.
~Neshomeh
(Stupid me, pressing enter before I was done.)
--Ls
Yeah, this was the first mission for those two, and I'm glad it went well.
As to the steam engine bit, my best recollection was that I was pointing out that they'd put a compartment on the engine specifically - that is, not in any of the train cars, hence the bolded calling out of the weirdness.
You can choose whatever piece of writing you feel you can write the best review for 😉
Which is here, of course. Very nice, very nice. I liked the interpretation of the typos; the MUSCULAR MALES NAKED part was especially funny. I liked the contrast between Kaguya's ranting, the fic's insanity, and Momoka's shyness. If I were to give criticism, I would say that the mission could use a bit more explanation of canon concepts, and Japanese words that most PPC readers wouldn't understand. Still, a good read, and quite funny.
--Ls
Thank you; that was a very nice review! I appreciate the specific comments on what you liked about the mission and why.
Re. "nonplussed," I mean it in the original sense of perplexed or at a loss for words. If you're curious, here's an interesting article about the origins of the word and how its meaning has changed in modern times.
~Neshomeh, word nerd.