Subject: Mission review:
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Posted on: 2024-12-28 01:38:58 UTC

Nice mission. That fic was painful to read, and Kaguya, Urato and Momya were a pleasure to read about as always. Interesting development in Arare's case, though.

One typo:

"I don't know this canon, but this fic's use of language is painful. Has this fic ever heard of paragraphs? Dialogues by different speakers need to be on different paragraphs!"

Should be "dialogue".

--Ls

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