Pardon me for being suspicious, but I've never seen you before, you've gone to the trouble of dredging up a two-months-dead thread seemingly with the sole intent of picking a bone with someone, and you seem to think it's okay to throw around problematic and hurtful words like "retarded" in reference to other people. This is not acceptable behavior on this forum. Please read our Constitution, like Firemagic said, if you intend to keep posting here. I'd also appreciate some sort of explanation for why you felt this post was necessary.

~Neshomeh

Anyways... One, I liked the ending, but anyways that's beside the point. This completely messes up the ending, as in it gives Madoka and Homura powers they shouldn't have. For example, after the end, I don't think Homura can go back in time. Even if she COULD, that shouldn't allow Madoka to appear on Earth. Also, why did Madoka going back in time make Sayaka appear in an explosion? Why could Sayaka remember being in Puella Magi heaven?

The screwing up relationships--no, I'm not referring to the yuri, I'm talking about the relations between Homura and Sayaka. And I quote:

"I grunt quietly, she's the one I did never really like too much because she was the one who ended up being the closest to Madoka, after a few times of time revision, and she was also often very rude to me"

No, that's not why Homura disliked Sayaka. Homura's not possessive, and she wants Madoka to be happy. She's become DETACHED from Sayaka because she knows she will become a witch or die, not because she was stealing Madoka from her.

I don't hate yuri. I love the yuri relationships between Madoka and Homura, Sayaka and Kyoko, and in other animes. It's just that this fanfic messes up the other relationships between characters in the anime, the friendships.

Oh, and one more thing: "It had really been great to see my parents again after such an extremely long time, since Akemi-san had been able to save this world from getting destroyed for long 1000 years, even when the last human was killed and no other Puella Magis except her existed, she still fought, hoping to save Madoka from becoming a witch. She and Madoka had been talking, again and again when Madoka had found a way to talk to her. But after sometime Akemi-san's Soul Gem had turned black but she didn't die, she cried, tried to make Madoka kill her but Madoka would never kill her, she just told her that Akemi-san had become an angel and even a corrupted Soul Gem, couldn't kill her, in fact all wounds of the world wouldn't kill her, she had become immortal.
As she didn't need to clean her soul gem anymore, she fought more and she nearly became mad, like I had so often in the old universe, but Madoka was always able to keep her sane, cheer her up and make her fight on."

What a wonderful idea, except for a) it was never established in previous chapters that Homura was anything but a regular Puella, b) the demons apparently destroyed the world a short time after Madoka's wish, not a thousand years later (and even then, if human civilization was gone, why did Madoka wait that long?) and most egregiously, c) that is all apparently taken from the goodfic A History of Magic, which takes the time to establish the Angels and makes it work with good writing. This fic seems to have plagiarized it without doing anything that made the original good.

Also, please read the Board Constitution--specifically rules 2 and 4.

OK, OK, fine. I personally really liked the ending, but to each his/her own. And either way, the fanfiction, coupled with the author's ADMITTED DISREGARD for canon...

Well, I hope to give it the sporking it deserves.

*adjusts glasses*

Yes, but... Well, Celestia has to have some sort of psych issues. It's difficult to be alive for that long and not go at least a little nutty. Banishing Luna surely took a toll. Then there's the loss of so many generations of friends- some maybe closer than others. Not to mention the stress of ruling a country and basically being a goddess. Some people have been known to just snap under the strain. She may be immortal, but her mind is clearly shown to have the same weaknesses and vulnerabilities as anyone else's. Anger isn't always the cause of murder.

I assure you that, were I to write something of that sort, it would be more in the vein of Death Note, where we focus on the investigation, the rush to find the killer, and the dangerous duel between minds, and the scheming and plotting on both sides. No "Saw" antics for me. The fandom has had enough of that between Cupcakes and Sweet Apple Massacre. As to what happens in Streak's fics... Well, I wouldn't write clop. I don't hate them, but I'm not one of them either.

I don't mind telling you I double and even triple check my work. I like to be thorough and ensure my writing isn't straying into badfic. Joe, you know I love the fandom. I love all my fandoms. I wouldn't do anything I know would be bad for it. It's like I said. Split-personality monster/good person can be good. Streak had a good foundation, but then he screwed up the roof and walls. He has the potential to write some truly good fanfiction, and he's ignoring it in favor of clop. He frustrates me so.

Believe me, I could do it. It would take a long time, and I would have to place each and every thread of the huge, complex web one at a time and with absolute precision, lest it should fall apart. But I could do it. I'm not as foolish as I seem. I may appear to be special with a capital "R", but there's more to me. I'm hurt that you'd expect mindless clop and gore from me, actually! I may be absolutely in love with Fluttershy, but love/romance does not equal sex. The attraction is psychological, not physical. And that is the key reason that I'm not a clopficcer. And I've never been big on blood and gore unless it was originally a Sue.

I won't try it, though. Not yet. Not until I have a more solid handle on writing the characters myself and have had a chance to really put it all together. No, I think I'll stick with my little oneshots for now...