*winces*

Subject: *winces*
Author: Hanako-san
Posted on: 2013-06-02 15:45:00 UTC

It's painful to read. The run-on sentences do not seem to be intentional, because even the Author's Notes seem to have them.

Imagine a person trying to narrate that. Even with the pauses in between due to the commas, they will still run out of breath quickly.

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Run-on sentences. by EK3 on 2013-06-02 14:55:00 UTC Reply

I have found an Angel Beats fic composed ENTIRELY of them.

(WARNING: It's rated M, I should probably let you know that.)
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9317940/1/Angel-Beats-Kanades-Allies

Each paragraph seems to consist of just one incredibly long sentence. And he's kept it going for 12 chapters and 24k words. ._.

Sound like the Lost Odyssey fic I found. by SpecstacularSC on 2013-06-02 19:09:00 UTC Reply

It's 20,000 words but only one chapter. Suspicious already, and then you discover that he put ther whole story - which is multiple chapters - into a single chapter.

And he still had the gall to MARK each chapter.

Half of it is bad grammar and bad plot, a fourth of it is a villain Stu with a really dumb name, and the other fourth is run-on sentences.

I've been running an MST of it for a while now, since there's plenty to say of it.

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Huh. by Hanako-san on 2013-06-02 15:47:00 UTC Reply

The story summary... How can a story be both canon AND non-canon?
*winces* by Hanako-san on 2013-06-02 15:45:00 UTC Reply

It's painful to read. The run-on sentences do not seem to be intentional, because even the Author's Notes seem to have them.

Imagine a person trying to narrate that. Even with the pauses in between due to the commas, they will still run out of breath quickly.