Re: Mission by
doctorlit
on 2011-10-23 03:35:00 UTC
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Danny Phantom's been coming up quite a bit lately! It's nice to see a good cartoon I'm familiar with getting some attention. (The title of the mission made me think it was going to be a Flintstones mission, which would have been even squickier for me.) This badfic was pretty insulting, changing around characters' sexualities like that, and without any thought put into it at all.
I saw a few typos:
*Just before Nathan and Luxury leave, Lux "tagged" at Nathan's arm instead of "tugged."
*Just before Clockwork leaves, the agents "watched Clockwork returning th them."
*During the exorcism, Nathan slapped the dummy "onto" the head, instead of just "on" its head.