New Mission!

New Mission! by HerrWozzeck on 2011-09-13 13:41:00 UTC

One of the marks of a good mission... by PoorCynic on 2011-09-18 11:22:00 UTC Reply

...is that is can be both entertaining and enthralling to people who are unfamiliar with the canon involved. You've nailed that here. I know next to nothing about both Avatar and Nausicaä, but I still thoroughly enjoyed this mission. Your character interaction in particular was very good. Florestan and Eusabius have an excellent rapport, and throwing Zerenze into the mix was a nice choice.

My one issue is regarding how large the quotes from the original badfic can get. There are points, particularly closer to the end, where the sheer length of the excerpts was dragging down the pacing of the mission. Really long excerpts always smack a bit of 'telling' rather than 'showing.' I would suggest that you try to describe what is happening in the badfic rather than just resorting straight to direct quotes.

Looking forward to your next mission!
Re: New Mission! by Caddy-Shack on 2011-09-14 17:40:00 UTC Reply

Nice Mission! Though I have no idea about Nausicaä of the Valley of Wind (Ha-ha copy.paste!) I am glad I know one of the settings.

One minor gripe (Read; inconsequential.) The Maquis de Sod saying/typing 'guys' just seems off to me. Dunno why, wasn't a deal breaker for me anyway. I am slightly put off by not knowing one of the canons, but it isn't that bad.

'a huge herd of gigantic land-based crustaceans' D; D; D; OH DEAR GOD CTHULHU WALKS THE EARTH! CTHULHU FHTAGN! CTHULHU FHTAGN!

...And un, I didn't realize that the only reason Jake got to meet the people was because he was paralyzed. I just thought they wanted to see him because of the he was playing with their multi-million/billion dollar toy. The more you know!

'Its tentacles came out and gently wrapped around Nausicaä's torso and drew her closer to the ohmu.'
And I love Zerenze pointing out the plot hole in the ohmu's fluid thing. Using logic like that is fun, and reading is is even better!

So, great mission, and Dun Dun Dun agents getting cozy!

Crazy times are had! by HerrWozzeck on 2011-09-14 17:52:00 UTC Reply

Thanks!

"...And un, I didn't realize that the only reason Jake got to meet the people was because he was paralyzed. I just thought they wanted to see him because of the he was playing with their multi-million/billion dollar toy. The more you know!"

Yeah, Jake wouldn't have been of much use to the RDA in his human form since he couldn't use his legs. (Remember all the shots of him using a wheelchair? Yeah, exactly.) In his avatar form, though, his legs are just fine.

"'a huge herd of gigantic land-based crustaceans' D; D; D; OH DEAR GOD CTHULHU WALKS THE EARTH! CTHULHU FHTAGN! CTHULHU FHTAGN!"

Ha ha, LOL. It's really not as bad as it sounds. They were only pissed off because one of their young ones was being held captive by Kejite. But yeah, it does get a little apocalyptic when they start swarming everything, but it only happens when you kidnap their young.

LOL yeah, the plot hole there was gigantic. And it just reeked of plot convenience, too. "Hey, let's get Nausicaa on Pandora! Wait, she needs to be in the Avatar program! No she doesn't, I have an ohmu that can secrete a magical serum that can let her breathe the air of Pandora without dying! Now I don't need to bother explaining anything else! Yay!" *rolls eyes*

Anyhow, crazy times are had for all. Thanks for the feedback!

But... by Caddy-Shack on 2011-09-14 23:01:00 UTC Reply

Er, what I meant was, wouldn't she want to meet him anyway? Like, if there is a new replacement, I would want to at least have a conversation with them, if I was the head of division/thing that is.

Nicely done! by OpinionedAngel on 2011-09-14 14:47:00 UTC Reply

Nice mission!

Personally, I prefer movies like "Nausicaä of the Valley of Wind" to "Avatar". At least Miyzaki can be //subtle//.

Not to mention the story is pretty cliche, and, Unobtanium? //Really?//

(Also, I think there already is a Mini for Avatar, but I could be wrong?)

Yeah, I agree with you there... by HerrWozzeck on 2011-09-14 15:44:00 UTC Reply

...though in terms of Studio Ghibli environmental aesop movies, absolutely nothing will beat out "Princess Mononoke" for me. Nothing. Seriously, that movie is pure unadulterated awesome, and it's incredibly subtle to boot.

I dunno, I thought Avatar was pretty good for what it was, but against Miyazaki's movies, I think it's bound to lose every time.

(Yeah, there was, from an RC that hasn't been documented at all on the Wiki, apparently.)