Subject: *puts on proofreader hat*
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Posted on: 2011-07-04 20:08:00 UTC

You don't know anything about Harry Potter and the wizarding world except that there is a very popular series of books about them.

This is wrong. The Doctor mentioned reading Deathly Hallows (I don't remember the exact episode, but I'm pretty sure it was during Series 2), so he would know more than that. It's understandable that Mittens wouldn't know this, but I thought I'd mention it.

If I'm going to do this, I may as well go through the whole thing:

Then the authors voice boomed.

Author's.

the story flickered trough Lucius, Draco and Narcissa

Through.

A confused looking angel appeared for a moment. It looked around and its expression became one of pure horror, then it disappeared again.

Not wrong exactly, but I would have expected an accidentally-created Whoniverse angel to default to the weeping variety. Maybe because it's a "better angel"?

the Death Eathers were still sitting motionless

Eaters.

[/proofreader]

The nothing around them obediently grew a small name-tag proclaiming it to be the property of the author.

Thanks for this. I quite literally laughed out loud.

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