*puts on proofreader hat* by
Becky-of-the-drayni
on 2011-07-04 20:08:00 UTC
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You don't know anything about Harry Potter and the wizarding world except that there is a very popular series of books about them.
This is wrong. The Doctor mentioned reading Deathly Hallows (I don't remember the exact episode, but I'm pretty sure it was during Series 2), so he would know more than that. It's understandable that Mittens wouldn't know this, but I thought I'd mention it.
If I'm going to do this, I may as well go through the whole thing:
Then the authors voice boomed.
Author's.
the story flickered trough Lucius, Draco and Narcissa
Through.
A confused looking angel appeared for a moment. It looked around and its expression became one of pure horror, then it disappeared again.
Not wrong exactly, but I would have expected an accidentally-created Whoniverse angel to default to the weeping variety. Maybe because it's a "better angel"?
the Death Eathers were still sitting motionless
Eaters.
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The nothing around them obediently grew a small name-tag proclaiming it to be the property of the author.
Thanks for this. I quite literally laughed out loud.
Hehehe! by
Fish Custard
on 2011-07-04 10:55:00 UTC
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I loved it, especially your agents, it's nice to see something different around here!
As for the fic (*bleurgh*), I hate it when people muck with the Doctor Who canon like that. There's so much in-universe you could use to create a great story, and yet people continue to smash other universes into it for the sake of... well I have no idea really! :P
Very nice job! by
Gamma
on 2011-07-04 03:54:00 UTC
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That fic just had to go, and you did it neatly and precisely. Like cutting a tumor out of the canon(s). Well done.
Possible typo report by
Krzysztof Drewniak
on 2011-07-04 02:16:00 UTC
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"After all, there can't be that many authors who knows Hermione has a middle-name, and still manages to misspell it."
You might want to check on the mixture of singular and plural nouns in that sentence.
"you are charged with random changes of tenses and between singular and plural nouns"
This charge seems strangely worded, I would look over it.
"He assumed there was bright flash."
Replace "was bright flash" with "was a bright flash".
Other then that, great mission.
Nice mission! by
HerrWozzeck
on 2011-07-03 21:03:00 UTC
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Fun times are had with that mission! I LOL'd at the angel part.
Just as a bit of advice: whenever someone puts up a mission, they usually update the Wiki with the mission, then the pages for the continua, then the pages for the agents themselves, and... you get the point.
I had one small gripe, though: I felt like a lot of it was just skimming through with RMC telling Mittens what to write down. I think it's better if both agents chime in with charges, getting some more banter going about the nature of the charge they're talking about. You got the stuff about what the fic does to the canon down really well, though, so... Yeah.
Good first mission! I can't wait to see more (and especially that Dragon Age fanfic you said you were gonna spork).