...Er, that said (and sincerely), I've a handful of grammary nitpicks.

After they toss the dummy: The two agents gave it a few seconds, and them followed it. Should probably be 'and then followed' there.

When discussing Moist, you have He talks in a monotone and gets everything disgustingly wet. He is very bland” There should be a period after the last bland.

In the charge list, there's a space missing between ex-girlfriend and creating, and a comma afterwards.

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Rather liked it! The interactions between Thomas and Orken are quite amusing-- especially his getting so upset about... getting slightly upset about the 1984 reference. It makes an excellent contrast with his partner-- they're good foils.

Nicely done! I know a bit aboout Dr. Horrible's Insane Blog, but haven't seen much of the musical myself.

(NOTE TO SELF: Watch the whole thing as soon as possible)

Like Thomas, I'm a big fan of Neil Patrick Harris, for both his acting talents and good looks.

(And yes, I am aware he is gay, but there's no rule saying I can't look, right?)

Another great mission Guv, keep 'em coming.

Billy/Penny being one of the few pairings that tugs at even my heartstrings, this Sue was rather displeasing to me. Glad to see her gone. I'm also glad we've now got a Dr. Horrible mission under our collective belt!

I didn't really follow what Thomas was doing to the Sue's body at the end. I don't remember a device that turned things into smoothies in the canon (although it has been a while since I've watched it, so maybe I've just forgotten). I also don't see why Thomas was able to figure out how to work it.

Also, while Thomas and Orken are discussing the television in the beginning, you have an extra "if" in Orken's sentence: "Honestly Agent Thomas, this does not strike me as a large canon violation, but if you can charge for it if you want."

If you haven't already seen it, it's only 30 minutes long and freely available on Youtube!

As a beta for this mission, I approve :P

I really like the bit at the end where Orken reports himself to the SO. It was so ... unexpected, and therefore really funny!