Oh, Orken. You try so hard to be a jerk, but if you keep showing mercy to Sues and being understanding toward your annoying partner, you'll not be fooling anyone for long. ^^ Being human rubs off on you, doesn't it?

So, yeah, finally got a chance to read the last mission and this, and had fun. I really do enjoy the fact that Thomas is the homicidal psychopath of the pair. It's never quite what I expect, which is awesome.

Some SPaG issues persist--for one, when addressing someone with a title, as in Agent Thomas, the title always needs to be capitalized. Since you're writing for Orken, you have to keep an eye on that. I recommend making use of the Find feature when you finish writing; it's a good way to check that your usage of X is consistent with its context each time X appears.

My moment of zen: Orken unbending enough to clean up puke. Beautiful. ^^

~Neshomeh

Have I ever mentioned I love Orken and Thomas? Because I do. They are brilliant.
Also--love the vomit thing. Not vomit itself, just the whole vomit thing in this interlude.

...what are you going to do next?

It was fun to read and I'm seriously curious about what will happen next.

Also, since I applied for permission, I'd like to ask you for the Sue. Just in case I get permission, of course.