Subject: I did.
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Posted on: 2011-05-04 18:55:00 UTC
Both of them. *takes a sip of her diet bleepcoke*
Don't know if you remember, I even commented on both in the IRC channel. :3
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New Interlude by
on 2011-05-04 06:01:00 UTC
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https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=1xXPg5_nT1dpXFPj5EdEXgmjCKBzSdzkNolMs23qro
Title: Interlude Two: Understanding
Summary: Thomas Greenwall and Orken 7861 tie up the loose ends from their last mission.
Not much to say about this, other than the summary. I guess I could remind you that there are still six minis from the last mission up for adoption. -
D'aww. by
on 2011-05-05 17:54:00 UTC
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Oh, Orken. You try so hard to be a jerk, but if you keep showing mercy to Sues and being understanding toward your annoying partner, you'll not be fooling anyone for long. ^^ Being human rubs off on you, doesn't it?
So, yeah, finally got a chance to read the last mission and this, and had fun. I really do enjoy the fact that Thomas is the homicidal psychopath of the pair. It's never quite what I expect, which is awesome.
Some SPaG issues persist--for one, when addressing someone with a title, as in Agent Thomas, the title always needs to be capitalized. Since you're writing for Orken, you have to keep an eye on that. I recommend making use of the Find feature when you finish writing; it's a good way to check that your usage of X is consistent with its context each time X appears.
My moment of zen: Orken unbending enough to clean up puke. Beautiful. ^^
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Erk! by
on 2011-05-05 18:56:00 UTC
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I got them. Ironically enough, both instances of "agent" not being capitalized were not addressed towards Thomas.
And I'm glad you liked the mission and interlude. -
Of course... by
on 2011-05-05 19:17:00 UTC
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...you meant the mission and the interlude. Many more to be found there. About half of them were capitalized, and half weren't. They're fixed now.
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[[[UNPARSABLE SUBJECT LINE]]] by
on 2011-05-05 17:09:00 UTC
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Have I ever mentioned I love Orken and Thomas? Because I do. They are brilliant.
Also--love the vomit thing. Not vomit itself, just the whole vomit thing in this interlude. -
Oh O'Neil... by
on 2011-05-04 14:46:00 UTC
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...what are you going to do next?
It was fun to read and I'm seriously curious about what will happen next.
Also, since I applied for permission, I'd like to ask you for the Sue. Just in case I get permission, of course.