Thanks. The character itself has been through numerous iterations because I wasn't sure how to write it at the time of its creation; the choice to write a character completely different from me, with completely different issues, completely different expectations and with a completely different worldview was a challenge I wanted to take on, and I'm glad it seems to be turning out well so far. I'm also glad the extra parts I put into the episode did not go unnoticed, as well.

I'll see what I can do in future episodes about all the weapon talk; part of the thing behind Call of Duty is that they occasionally do spend a bit too much time focusing on the weapons and equipment to try to make things seem more 'authentic' and it's embarrassing when they get things wrong or when things look out of place, or have been inserted for rule-of-cool. I could and probably will tone that back for other or future episodes that aren't so modern or military-oriented; you're not the only person that's told me that my attention to the weapons and equipment specifics goes slightly too far.

I'm not exactly sure what you mean by 'dry and clinical' at the moment; occasionally I try to go for a somewhat sarcastic tone of voice when writing (a good example of this would be describing the way the law of lost plot critical items could have obfuscated something), but I felt that in this application it was best to keep the narration laid back, somewhat objective and down to earth, even if I did load it up with a lot of superfluous detail.

Howdy! Thank you very much, the feedback is appreciated.

I'll try to fix up the indenting. I suppose I could put soft linebreaks after each one, as well if that'll help clear things up, and I'll replace the horizontal rules with the asterisks next update, which should be soon. I just have a couple minor changes to make and I'll reupload the PDF.

I like to go a little further when I write. Felt kinda odd not to include those extra features for an entry that size, so I added them, although it's something of force of habit.

Heh. I know just how to do that.

(insert ragequit and Internet dramaz here.)

That ought'a do it!


Jokes aside, thanks, much appreciated. I love talking about little details, and it makes me feel great when my audience understands them (but does not feel patronized or talked down to), as well.

Permission granted! This seems like a good fit. {= )

~Neshomeh

I am in awe of DML's attention to detail, and I find his writing highly entertaining, always a recommendation. I'm not sure I should be the one to give the yea/nay, as I have talked to him somewhat about it and am uncertain that I can be all... y'know, unbiased and such, like I theoretically ought be. Or something.

Anyway, he's got my vote, but I think I ought not be the final word? Neshomeh? Come back? We adore you? In the way that won't get a disapproving Phobos staring at us?

I'm entirely in favor of granting DML Permission. He writes well (if slightly verbose at times), and definitely gets what we do here. I don't think I can give Permission myself due to potential conflicts of interest, but yeah. Thumbs up from here.

Thank you, Neshomeh and JulyFlame!

The sketches are going up now. So far only Pam's is nearing completion; the rough pencilling is finished, and I'm adding ink by using a tablet. Cliffy's will be on the way but I have a bit of a backlog of work I've got to get through and don't want to start multiple projects I can't finish.

http://delta-mike-lima.webs.com/apps/photos/

This is quite amazing work, excellent job.

(Julys vote yes even though they don't have a vote.)