Subject: Re: New mission!
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Posted on: 2011-01-05 05:45:00 UTC

The grammar in those sentences...as as as as as...I don't think I could have read through an entire story structured that way.

I love how you had Earwig befriend Luga/Gall early on, then had her help with the wrap-up later. Gall seems like a much more interesting character than Kana anyway (no doubt thanks to your writing, rather than the Suethor's), and I'm glad she's a member of the PPC now.

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