Subject: Re: Thanks
Author:
Posted on: 2010-01-19 22:03:00 UTC
You're welcome. I appreciate your effort :)
Subject: Re: Thanks
Author:
Posted on: 2010-01-19 22:03:00 UTC
You're welcome. I appreciate your effort :)
I've been thinking about this for a long time, and have finally decided to try my hand at a sporking mission. But conisdering how I don't have very good self-esteem, I'm not sure of what fic of my to put up as an examnple of my writing work.
My choice of fic is varied, but as of late, I have been doing movie/game "fanmakes" (or parodies, if you prefer), though characterization is my biggest issue/worry.
(BTW, my penname on FanFiction.net under is Gijinka Renamon, and I give full permission to spork/MST my earlier works, back when I didn't know what I was doing.)
Also, do have to know the fandoms back-to-front? Since smnall details tend to slip past me...
For starters, your agents look pretty good - not too ambitious, they err on the flat side, but not by much, and your actual written missions should flesh them out. That you've given them very similar (angry) personalities could be difficult, as you don't want your missions to turn into shouting matches, but that's a matter of how you handle them, which I cannot predict.
On the other hand, I'm a little wary of the fact that you're going after a scripted fic, as narrative forms are much easier to PPC, and there's no need to make your first mission too hard. Also, is it impossible to find the original text, rather than a sporked version? If so, I would strongly recommend finding another badfic to work on; it's not like there's a shortage.
As for your writing sample, I can say little about the content or characterisation given that I don't know the canon, but you have numerous errors and stylistic issues that worry me. One appears as early as the second sentence - a missing word ("they began to fight who owned the light." - it should be "began to fight over", unless you mean they began to fight whoever owned it, but that doesn't seem to be the case). You haven't got too many typos, but those that are there ("yalter top, a whitye") are strikingly bad, and should have been picked up by a spell-checker. You're lacking commas in many necessary places and don't appear to have a good grasp on the use of semicolons. Also, the extensive clothing descriptions bother me - they remind me of a Suefic at times - but if that's a characterisitc of the canon, then of course it's not relevent.
My biggest problem with your request is that we haven't seen very much of you on the Board. In the six weeks you've been here, you've greeted newer newbies and made a few comments, most of which were very short. Your "re: Haiti" post particularly troubles me, given that two of your three sentences are just raw condemnations - "bitchy", to use the phrase. Anger issues or not, this is really not the sort of thing we want to see from other members, especially if it's all we see.
So I'm sorry, but not this time. Permission refused. Please try again in another month, and until then, I encourage you to join in some more in-depth discussions around here - start some yourself, maybe, and ask questions. Also, please take to heart the issues I've raised above, and don't just copy-paste this Permission request into your new post in February; I'd like to see some indication that you've thought about it.
And last, don't take this as a blow to your self-esteem. You're not the first person to be refused Permission, nor the last, and there's no shame in it.
Thanks for the raw, honest opinion.
As for the Haiti-related post, I was thinking about it, and thought the post //WAS// a little bit mean, and felt really bad about it. Sometimes I say/write things without thinking about it first, which is a bad habit I ned to work on.
And my agents, hm... well, I guess I still have to do more work on them. I was kind of in a rush to get them up, so, maybe I should add more details.
Also, my writing sample might have been a bad choice, but thanks for pointing out some flaws, I'll have to go back and fix those.
And finally... maybe I should have waited a bit longer to put up a request. (I do kinda want to go after that one fic, but I'm sure how it would work.) Maybe after a month or so, I'll try again.
Thanks again for your time.
You're welcome. I appreciate your effort :)
Is this an official Permission request, or a prelude to a request? It sounds like the latter, so let me direct you to the Permission article and the relevant FAQ questions so you can refresh your knowledge there.
In short, pick any example of your writing which you think shows off your abilities best. Write something new, if you like.
You do need to know the fandoms relatively well, but no one expects you to have memorised Aragorn's family tree or the computer terminology of Star Trek. You are expected to look up anything you're unsure of.
Also, when you make your official request, include links as well as your agent bios and writing sample.
Thanks for the tip, I was unsure about that.
Anyway, here's a link to one of my most recent fics, a Kingdom Hearts fanmake (my second one, actually.): http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5430211/1/KingdomCartoonHearts
Again, characterization is my biggest concern, though I don't mind comments and helpful criticism.
And now for my agents:
Name: Nicole
Race: Human
Home Continuum: Real World Earth
Department: Floaters
Response Center: 113
Partner: Agent Keats
Fandoms/Specialties: Pokemon, Digimon, Yu-Gi-Oh, Tales of Symphonia, Harry Potter, Kingdom Hearts, Wicked, Pirates of the Carribean, Invader Zim, The Simpsons, Avatar: The Last Airbender, Teen Titans (cartoon) and some Redwall, Narnia, Power Rangers, and Star Wars.
Pet Peeves: Anything rape-related, Fan Dumb, tweenies, Twilight, Mary Sues, unfair character bashing, child abuse.
Lust Objects: The 10th Doctor (Doctor Who), Aragorn, Legolas (Lord of the Rings), Captain Jack Sparrow, Will Turner (Pirates of the Carribbean), Eliwood (Fire Emblem), Ichigo Kurosaki (Bleach), Tommy Oliver (Power Rangers), Jacob Black (Twilight [movie-verse, that is]).
Weapons of choice: Anything stabby, though she doen't mind guns, and also likes to be... creative... with her kills.
Description: Brown hair with caramel streaks, blue eyes, glasses, is slightly... heavy, weight-wise.
Personality: Quiet, short-tempered, impatient, sarcastic, cynical, prone to violent fits, intelligent, can be quirky at times.
Name: Joshua Keats
Age: About 17-20
Race: Half-Elf
Home Continuum: Tales of Symphonia
Department: Floaters
Response Center: 113
Partner: Agent Nicole
Fandom/Specialties: Tales of Symphonia, Redwall, Kingdom Hearts, The Simpsons, Harry Potter, Star Wars, Lord of the Rings, Fullmetal Alchemist, Avatar: The Last Airbender, Lord of the Rings, Invader Zim, Pirates of the Caribbean.
Pet Peeves: Being mistaken for an Elf, MPreg, fangirls, Mary Sues, Rape-related offenses, Twilight
Lust Objects: Won't say, though he does seem to have a crush on a certain dark-haired ninja...
Weapon of choice: Usually prefers a two-handed broadsword
Description: Fairly tall and tan-skinned with hazel eyes and grass-green hair.
Personality: Short-tempered, cynical, impatient, serious and stern, can often come across as cold and indifferent.
Finally, this is the story I'm going after, a Mary Sue-ridden Invader Zim fic:
http://www.projectafterforums.com/index.php?showtopic=917
Whoops, that last part should be:
Also, I do have to know the fandoms back-to-front? Especially since small details tend to slip past me...