Subject: Re: Intro
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Posted on: 2013-04-17 20:23:00 UTC

This is fun! I like the way you took fanfiction concepts and made them fit with the MLP universe. It will help explain Printworthy's anger against badfic problems.

Some typos!

"'. . . how can I forget the pegasi, who can directly change the weather and walk and clouds!'"

"'They warp and bend my world and force it to fit their heat driven fantasies.'" ("heat driven" should have a hyphen in between)

"'. . . especially when one proves more competent in combat then expected…'"

"'Hey, hey, it’s alright, um, Mr. Unicorn.'"

And more generally, you have some extra parentheses floating around in a couple of spots.

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