Subject: Nice.
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Posted on: 2009-07-31 19:15:00 UTC

"Er... do any of you have a Remote Activator on you?"

I think that was my favorite line. It cut the drama in a very good way. *g*

I caught a couple of things:

1. Captain Dandy rustled his feathers.
-- Really?

2. She [Tango] squeezes his hand and turned away.
-- I assume that's meant to be "squeezed."

Also, I just noticed that the text turns red on mouse-over. Is there a reason for that?

I look forward to the conclusion of the story. And then I'll really have to go back and read everything straight through, because it will be excellent. {= )

~Neshomeh

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