Subject: A few things first...
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Posted on: 2008-08-07 07:01:00 UTC

First, why a cloning experiment? Conducted by whom? And why should the experiment result in a female elf with the personality and tastes of a teenage human girl? Why not simply write a teenage human girl with Liv Tyler- or Cate Blanchett-like features?

Second, a couple of things to watch out for from the writing samples:

- You want "spitting image," not "splitting image." That would be like double vision.

- "as he lay," not "laid."

~Neshomeh

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