Subject: Hmm, interesting!
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Posted on: 2014-04-10 15:42:00 UTC

The first one looks like a rehash of the movie so far. Dumb, but a pretty boring sort of dumb. I'll scan later chapters to see if it goes off the rails later on.

The last one is actually almost good, as hard as that might be to believe. The mechanics don't suck, and this girl who grew up on a magical island with dragons actually struggles with being dropped into the middle of Hogsmeade with no clue, no proper clothing, and unable to speak English. Props for having actual conflict! This one's safe.

The middle one, on the other hand... it only gets as far as her joining the Fellowship (at Elrond and Gandalf's insistence, not her own), and the mechanics are not as egregiously terrible as I prefer to spork, but it could definitely prove a good DOGA or SIELU case if not a DMS case. She invents two uncanonical islands, one of which has friendly dragons and an uncanonical humanoid race that apparently speaks Greek, or something like it... the Elves are NOT speaking any Sindarin I ever heard of, despite the author knowing that they do speak Sindarin and that most people speak Westron... and all the uncanon stuff is pretty much superfluous to the plot so far. It could be a mission for someone. I'm just not sure it's a mission for me.

Thanks, though! I appreciate anyone Circle-diving for me. ^_^

~Neshomeh

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